? asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

rate my poem. what would you give it out of 10?

Swirling shades,

Of pearly white.

Fill the air,

Replace the night.

A footstep,

on the inch-thick snow,

A girl in white

And hair, that glows.

We wonder who,

This girl might be.

Is she an angel?

will she flee?

She only comes,

On nights of snow,

starlight fades

and still she glows

is this girl?

a vivid dream?

with eyes of chocolate,

skin of cream?

Passing through the starlight night,

Fading with the suns first light.

Does the sunlight hide her glow,

Or has she somewhere else to go?

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago
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    Wow if I had to rate, 15 out of 10 lol. I mean it's like really nice and the punctuations and just everything is perfect!

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  • 9 years ago

    9/10 !

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  • 9 years ago

    9/10...

    Its one of the best poems i have read. The element of mystery is good. Makes us wonder who "she" is...

    If i gave u a 10/10 you'd probably be too satisfied with our poem and may not improve. So keep doing better!

    I recommend you to give an answer to who"she" is... make up an 'Angel of Winter'..it will sound like those 'Odes'!

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    4 out of 10. Pedestrian.

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  • 9 years ago

    I really like it, will give 9/10.

    Few questions, why does she come on nights of snow only, is this a real person you refer to, or is it some sort of dream?

    Anyway, like it... I like its rhyming pattern and all.. nice, keep it up!

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    I think it really has the amazing feel of a poem, it rhymes so it qualifies, I think i'll give it a 9 out of 10. Really well done.

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    It's really good! I like how you used metaphors through out, really made it a good poem to read :)

    9/10

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  • 9 years ago

    it's quite good, rates a 6/10 from me...

    have you read 'Ode' by Arther O'Shaunessey or 'Cells' by Rudyard Kipling - both recommended!

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    I like the concept of it. I think it needs more details and more... passion?

    I think it could be a lot better if you spent more time on it and really think about it. (:

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  • 9 years ago

    I thought it was really beautiful. I'll say a 10/10! I really liked it!

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