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題目是: Tom 和 Lisa 昨天到山上遊玩。

圖一 Tom在賞鳥 Lisa在對花照相

圖二 他們倆在吃東西

圖三 一隻鳥飛到Tom面前,然後他要餵牠吃麵包,然後鳥就飛走了,Lisa看到鳥飛走後在笑。

Tom and Lisa are good friend. They went to mountain climbing yesterday.

Tom likes to bird watching,so he watched a lot of beautiful birds. Lisa loves flowers very much,so she took many pictures about flowers. In the afternoon,they had lunch.Then a brid flew on the floor,Tom wanted to feed the bird,but the bird was worry.Lisa laughted.

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  • 10 years ago
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    正確寫法:

    Topic: Tom had a great mountain trip with Lisa yesterday.

    Tom enjoyed watching birds; and, Lisa enjoyed taking pictures of beautiful flowers.

    During lunch hour, there was a bird flying down and asking for food from Tom.

    However, Lisa laughed at Tom because the bird suddenly flew away from him.

    你的寫法 :

    Tom and Lisa are good friend (friend要加s, 負數). They went to (沒有 to) mountain climbing yesterday.

    Tom likes to (沒有 to) bird watching (是名詞,不是動詞所以沒有to. 例如: I like flower 是一樣的), so he watched a lot of beautiful birds. Lisa loves flowers very much, so she took many pictures about (應該是of, 不是about) flowers. In the afternoon,they had lunch.( 你有太多的句號, 你要交代是一整件事情, 所以不要用具號結尾, 可以用分號或是逗號 接著續說下一句. 例如. In the afternoon, they had lunch; then, a bird flew....) Then a brid (拼字錯誤 bird) flew (flew的後面要加上飛下來, 所以是 flew down....) on the floor, (句號) Tom wanted to feed the bird, but the bird was worry.Lisa laughted. (這整句都錯了, 而且鳥應該不會worry 擔心吧!如果你要表達的意思是: 鳥很怕Tom, 所以飛走了, Lisa 就因此嘲笑Tom. 寫法如下: Lisa laughed at Tom because the bird was afraid of Tom; hence, it flew away from him.)

    如果是全民英檢, 你的分數可能會很低喔.. 因為你錯的部分幾乎都是很基本的文法應用. 有任何問題再發問吧!! ^^ 祝學業進步!! 加油!!

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