How does this wording sound?

We are having a destination wedding. Privet ceremony with just a few family members. 2 weeks after our wedding my parents are throwing us a "reception)"

How does all this sound for the wording of the invites?

I'm open for changes thats why I'm asking. Not to be told is a bad idea! My family & friends are very open & excited about the idea!

Also at the bottom where it says no one under 21. We had to chose between no guest under 21 or no alcohol. Beings that cutting under 21 guest is cutting about 30+ people (kids) out. Making room for more friends & family.

Mr. and Mrs. John Smith

have the honour of announcing

the marriage of their daughter,

Suzie Anne

to

Frank Robert Miller

on Saturday, October 1st 2011

The couple was joined in marriage

in a private seaside ceremony in

(destination wedding, State & City)

Please join them for a luau reception

celebrating their union

October 15th 2011 at 3pm

(address)

To RSVP please visit (couples wedding website)

or call (Mothers of bride) 555-5555

Please come dress in your best luau attire!

Also please understand due to facility rules please no one under 21!

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  • 9 years ago
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    Sorry....don't like it. It's rather disjointed. It starts as an announcement, but then goes into an invitation. Also, never use October 1st, 2011....using the "1st" is not proper English. Start off with the invitation, then go into "they were married in a private ceremony."

    Here is my idea:

    John and Carol Smith

    request the honor of your presence at a celebration

    to honor the recent marriage of their daughter

    Suzie Anne to Frank Robert Miller

    The luau celebration will be

    Saturday, October 15, 2011

    Three o'clock in the afternoon

    Golf Shores Country Club

    111 Golf Shores Drive

    Tampa, Florida

    Suzie and Frank were married in a private

    ceremony on October 1, 2011

    Please RSVP to Carol Smith

    at 555-5555 or via the couple's

    website at: www..........

    Due to facility rules, no one under 21 is allowed.

    Please come dressed in your best luau attire!

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  • 9 years ago

    If you're eloping you don't have a reception. All an invitation like this says to guests is that they weren't good enough to see you get married, but now they're supposed to go to your website where I'm sure you have a slew of registry information and buy you a gift. It may not tick EVERYBODY off, but I guarantee it will tick SOME of them off.

    What you would properly do in this case is invite people to a party without telling them you were married, and then announce the marriage at the party. It cannot appear to be a gift giving occasion or it will look very tacky.

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  • 9 years ago

    I think this is fine. Actually I really like the wording, except for the last line.

    Maybe:

    "Please come dress in your best luau attire!

    *Adult reception, 21 and older only please due to facility regulations."

    Then you only address the invitation to those who are over 21.

    Good Luck and Congrats! :)

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  • 9 years ago

    It sounds good,but is a little long.Shorten it up.

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