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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesBooks & Authors · 9 years ago

A relationship between two sister characters?

Earlier I just started blankly writing a little scene that popped into my head. I don't have a plot nor do I have any idea why I just started writing three pages of rubbish, but I think I could probably take it somewhere.

All I know is that there are two Japanese sisters; one is twelve years old and wants to get closer with her older sister, who is twenty, who has also sheltered herself from the outside world and became more antisocial. However she's very open and loving towards only her sister. I'm not sure if I want to add friends yet.

Here's a little clip:

My sister is very strange. She writes a lot and has a strange vocabulary. Sometimes she paints these pictures all over her wall, but doesn’t tell me what they mean. I can’t talk much to her either – she’ll just slide a little paper animal under the door in response to what I say. I don’t even know what it means! She’s full of nothing but secrets our mother would say and that’s very sinful. Our mother thinks that she doesn’t open up enough to the family. Since she turned twenty, she hasn’t been herself.

They wanted to admit me to some mental institution. My little Aiko thought of it as a threat and tried to spend more time with me. She would sit at my door and pass paper animals with me, but she wouldn’t know what my responses would be. I could send her a tiger under the door and it could represent something malicious, but she unfolds it and refolds it back into a delicate creature such as a paper crane or even a mockingbird. If only she was old enough to truly understand – maybe someday, but for now, I have to reside to small talk and paper animals.

Should I define Aiko's older sister as insane? Or should I try to twist something around? I was thinking of writing this as a Cyborg-like novel, but I'm not sure what to do with it!

Can you help? No constructive criticism is needed, just a bit of a boost. Thanks!

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago
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    I think thats nice..it is a good idea to go with the reader and make her seem as if she is insane..I am sure later on you will come up with a twist.

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    4 years ago

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