Oakwolf asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

Are you getting sleepy? Please comment on this poem?

Hypnogogia

You will want to close your eyes

to let the easy warmth

of smooth words

swallow sharper syllables,

envelope them in shushing sibilance.

Feel how every word curves, weaves

serpentine in the sand of sliding sound.

Let loose the twine that ties your mind

too tightly.

Feel your soul expand into the space

created as you now allow expanse, full liberty

for every kind of unbound thought.

Step light along the precipice of sanity

aware that you will never fall

no matter how precarious things seem

because you balance perfectly

at will.

The dance of genius is one at which you are adept.

Now your eyes see not these words

but what they speak:

Consider the things you wish

and let the light change colors in your mind

to suit the mood you’ve sought.

Let these tones into your mind,

just seeds

that grow into the things you need to see.

Remember every thought is true creation

and all created things are equal in imagination.

See how indigo and fuchsia meld on each edge,

observe how easily a sparrow makes her song blend

into the low hum of wind that crosses continents and oceans.

Your mind continues to increase quick,

prismatic, wide like sheen on untouched water.

It intersects with everything and becomes a part,

welcoming the unity

not as surrender but as victory.

You never will capitulate again

to those who say that things must stay

or ever were

the same.

You are released to be what you will

be.

When I snap my fingers

you will awake.

Update:

Neon: Both/neither. The spelling I used is the one my dictionary offers for the word. But the poem is not exactly about that, in my intent. I, the poet, am hypnotizing you, the reader, that's the intent.

Note, though: I did not snap my fingers. None of you are awake. Thought you might understand your day better if you knew that, going forward. ;)

Update 2:

Sandy: Oakwolf House accepts paypal and gifts of cash. ;)

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    Yes I am

    this is interesting, was it my condition or did you just try to hypnotize me?

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  • Sandra
    Lv 4
    4 years ago

    An evening libation? Very nice idea. I will happily join you but may I be excused to put on some mosquito repellent first? It would be nice if those birds you mention along with the bats that circle about here in South Texas at night would eat some of those pesky insects. Be glad to share some of my "Deep Woods Off" with you.

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  • 9 years ago

    Hi

    When I was reading it I found myself in spiraling ways. Such a great imagery. I have read it for several times.

    You never will capitulate again

    to those who say that things must stay

    or ever were

    the same.

    I hope it works. Thanks for hypnotizing me! I never will.

    By the way I was thinking if you could shorten some lines to make it the best poem ever.

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  • 9 years ago

    Oakwolf, you are a sheer genius for this poem.

    You never will capitulate again

    to those who say that things must stay

    or ever were

    the same.

    You are released to be what you will

    be.

    This makes me think deeply.

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  • 9 years ago

    NO WAY.this is unlike the other poems i've read today,

    This has meaning,life and is sensible.Others do not need to decode it.

    Not boring as watching grass grow as some alliuded to.

    Write more to keep me awake.I am not ready for Geritol.

    byeeexxx

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  • 9 years ago

    Did you mean: "Hypnagogia?" Or was the misspelling part of the spell? The spell before sleep or daydreaming, creatively thinking is one in which thoughts do flood, words fading softly away. You paint well but damn you for the wake up call! lol

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  • 9 years ago

    Wow! This felt very soothing - a powerhouse of gentle thoughts. Don't snap your fingers yet. I want to be in this magical world for a while.

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  • HD
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    I love that falling. Behind my lids the colors form faces, some are frightening, others interesting, but each night between the waking and the sleeping I wait for them.

    wonderful work.

    Source(s): hypnagogic hallucinations - everyone has them as they fall asleep, it is perfectly normal
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  • doe
    Lv 7
    9 years ago

    This was w o n d e r f u l !! I loved reading it and I'm so thankful to be asleep cause my day has been draining in fact my week has been draining and this was floating on a tranquil sea of peace.

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  • Anonymous
    9 years ago

    I wish I could hear this spoken in your voice; beter yet, on ipod. It is divine and sacred. That is in fact the most spiritually soothing piece I have ever read.

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  • 9 years ago

    I'm in a deep sleep how relaxing you are, lovely before you snap your fingers and I awake will you keep me in this peaceful sleep

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