RHH: check/wreck the verse?

I never knew a luh, luh, luh, a love like this

If you know my songs you know how my love life is

Boo, you my one light when the sunlight dips

And you only get one night, I mean life, whatever

Met her like a fair weather day I promise you

The one that got away I got a few

Novice, can’t get a grip, I got no vice like truth

Like you, slow motion through the meadow

Love potion swollen heart syndrome tempo

Sometimes you gotta let go, get the memo

No typos but you won’t let the guy go (geico) like gecko

Well okay, presto, mad rabbit dash and im stuck like Velcro

Fellow fellows say well bro, It ain’t like hell froze

Ice box for my heart yeah she made it melt though

Sickening, late night mimicking blue jay leno

So now I’m a dead soul, had me damned at hello

Update:

@nexx - a vice is a frailty or moral weakness in the eyes of a society, as well a clamp tool for holding things, so it's a punchline. I have a "weakness" for truth, and it helps me hold on to things.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Best verse on this site in ages.

    Only 2 things:

    - "I got no vice like truth" - I don't get it. Is that like a saying, like "The truth has no vice" or something? I'm sure that's a reference to something, but I can't figure it out.

    - "No typos but you whon't let the guy go like gecko" - Get rid of the "no typos", it's useless.

    EDIT:

    That's kinda unclear. You should say "There's no vice like truth" instead of "I got no vice like truth". Especially since you just used the word "got" in the previous line.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Yeah, that's a really good verse. I'd start workin on writing hooks and getting your rap voice and flow now, cause you're pretty good at writing, atleast from this verse.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    "No typos but you won’t let the guy go (geico) like gecko"

    Dope punchline. I like it.

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