Is this freestyle any good?

I am a scavenger a glimmer of a man

Roaming freely on this darkened baron land

The air is cold, numbness in my hand

Escaping to the place where its free damned

Its dark here, night all the time

No sunlight, just memories of the shine

Army of the dead, walking in a line

Anybody out there, please gimme a sign

Thick smoke fills the air, seeing/feeling hazy

Nothing works, I keep on praying

Living this way, I’m going crazy

But I did nothing before so maybe this will make me

Earthquakes all around me, I cluth the walls

Ground beneath disappears, I start to fall

I’m not alive or dead, im not what I used to be

No shadow following, I am only used to me

Please gimme some feedback, I know some of the lines fall a few syllables short but this is just off the top of my head.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    yeah reading it it sound kind of good now it will depend on your flow and skills to turn it into a hot fire

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wob3T1Acvkk

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  • 1 decade ago

    im tired of these ****** artists

    why is everyone on yahoo answers garbage

    listen u lame ock

    get a new day job

    u b**ch and u crave cock

    i will shut u down easily

    cuz my raps is sicka then eazy-e

    u dont wanna beef wit me

    no i dont carry brooms, but i will come sweep da street

    my frees are bazerk

    u a geek and nerd

    so go on ya nees and go slurp

    sit back in ya place

    if i seen u in person youll get smacked in da face

    and no i dont give a f**k bout catchin a case

  • 1 decade ago

    Yeah it is really good.

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