what do you think of this poem/song? :)?

i just wrote a poem and i wanted to know what everyone thought of it :) here it is

With just a single word, she got me addicted

With just a single smile, my sadness was lifted

Shes all I ever wanted, the girl of my dreams

But everything is not always what it seems

Because shes got a boyfriend that doesn’t see what shes worth

She one in a…however many peoples on this earth

OH if she let me have her heart, I wouldn’t break it

But shes got a boyfriend and I cant take it

Im walking down the beach, with no ones hand to hold

Its 17 degrees but I cannot feel the cold

The sun just set, darkness shrouds the shore

The moon shining brighter that ive ever seen before

I look up at the stars and wait for one to fall

Cuz there is one thing I want more than anything at all

Our love is written in the stars, I know that this is fate

Maybe our time isn’t now but for this girl I will wait

Because shes got a boyfriend that doesn’t even care

Half as much as I would if me and her were a pair

OH if she let me have her heart, I wouldn’t break it

But shes got a boyfriend and I cant take it

I want to be the guy to wipe away her tears

I want to be the guy to shield her from her fears

Ill stay up on the phone on her sleepless nights

Shes scared of the dark so I will be her light

Ill help her to her feet when she cant stand

When no ones there to help her she can take my hand

Ill always be there for her, through good and bad

And ill give her the best memories shes ever had

But shes got a boyfriend, who she loves with all her heart

She smiles when shes with him, and cries when they’re apart

So I will watch her as she smiles, and hold her when she cries

And I will gently take my finger and wipe the tears from her eyes

I will wait for her, because shes worth waiting forever

I will wait till me and her are together

If she let me have her heart, I wouldn’t break it

But for now shes got a boyfriend and I cant take it

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    <3

  • 1 decade ago

    omq i love thys poemm . yurr a qreat writer and i think you shuld keep it up yu culd make it somewhere with stuff like thyss

  • 1 decade ago

    i think it is the sweetest thing ever(:

    whoever you're talking about,

    must be one special person.

    i love it.. <3

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