超級牛 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

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My favorite sport

With the technology geting more beter,people tend to stay at home to watch the TV and surf the internet. They are too lazy to go out, even going to buy lunch. So there are lesser and lesser people to exercise. But I think we should exercise properly to keep our health.

My favorite sport is to ride the bycicle,especially at night. When I am biking,I can feel the warm wind,see the beautiful landscape,and breathe the fresh air.Mostly,biking at night can avoid the heavy sunshine,so I can exercise comfortably.To sum up,biking can not only relieve my exhuastion,but also soothe my mind. There is nothing better than such a kind of sport.

Update:

♥PiPi ( 實習生 1 級 ): 非常感謝你的回答~~果然是留過學的,改起文來就是不一樣!雖然你這樣寫更自然,但是改得有點太多HAHA,我也不知道從何問起,可能還沒有辦法一下跳到你那種程度吧??但是還是感謝你PO了一個示範文囉^^

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  • KL
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    My Favorite Exercise

    With the technology getting much better, people tend to stay at home

    watching TV or surfing the Internet. They are too lazy to go out, not even

    for buying lunch. Fewer and fewer poeple are doing exercises now,

    although I think we should exercise properly to keep ourselves in

    good health.

    My favorite exercise is riding a bycicle, especially at night.

    When I am riding a bike, I can feel the warm breeze,

    enjoy beautiful sceneries, and breath in a lot of fresh air.

    I ride my bycicle at night mostly to avoid the strong sunlight,

    so I can exercise comfortably.

    All in all, riding a bike can not only restore myself from exhaustion,

    but can also soothe my mind. To me, there is no better exercise than

    riding a bike.

  • ?
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    With the technology getting more advanced ,people tend to stay at home and watch TV, or surf the internet. They are too lazy to go out, even go out to buy a lunch. So it seems that there are less and less people doing sports. I don't think it's a good phenomenon, no wonder people get sick easily these days.

    So I think we should choose one favoriate sport and make it a habit to excercise routinely to keep our health in good condition.

    My favorite sport is to ride the bycicle,especially at ni ght time. When I am biking,I can feel the soft breeze ,see the beautiful scenery ,and breathe the fresh air. Mostly,biking at night can avoid the heavy sunshine,so I can exercise comfortably.To sum up,biking can not only relieve my pressure ,but also soothe my mind. There is nothing better than such a kind of sport.

  • 1 decade ago

    My favorite sport

    While the technology is improving,people tend to stay at home, watch TV and surf the internet. They are too lazy to go out, even going out and buy lunch for themselves are disturbing. Therefore, there are less people going exercise. However, I think people should exercise regularly in order to keep our body in good condition and good health.

    My favorite sport is cycling. I like to go cycling especially at night time, because when I am riding my bicycle,I can feel the wind,see the beautiful landscape,and breathe the fresh air. Most importantly,cycling at night time can avoid the exposure of sunshine. As a conclusion,cycling can not only relieve my exhuastion,but also smoothen my mind. There is nothing better than such a great sport.

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