沛蕾 asked in 教育與參考出國留學 · 1 decade ago

請大家幫忙我改改下面的英文自傳!!

這是我們期末考的英文自傳要修改,但我不知道錯誤究竟在哪裡?

請大家幫忙更改! 但拒絕中文式翻譯!謝謝!

My name is Chen Szu-Yu, and my English name is Jenny.

I was born in Taipei, on August 13th, 1992.

There are five people in my family, including my

grandmother, parents, younger sister, and me.

We belong to the three generations in my family!

My father is a businessman who is my role model, he always says

” Time is money” haven’t anything more the most important than the time!,

so I learned if I had an appointment with my friends don’t be late!, Plus,

my father also is very frugal, he thought as long as things can use until that

breakdown!

My mother is an earnest housewife, so she has no doubt become my familys

great cook! She always cook a lot of that I’ve never ate dishes, such as,

“Squid and field snails with garlic”I like this dish very much.

As for my sister, she’s very smart. Every time I’m going out with her,

especially when we got lost, she always can calm down and find road to go

home. I can’t endure that if I miss the road I’ll become very irritable and

agitated! About this I require to learn more from my sister.

My family have always been my good companions in joy and in sorrow.

As soon as we have free time in weekend, we’re going to temple and walking.

I graduated from ChingShuei elementary school and junior high school.

Now, I ‘m studying in my third year in the Department of Applied Foreign

Language of De-Lin institute of Technology. English is my major,

and Japanese is my second major. In these three years,

I’ve learned how to read an article, write a composition, strengthen my English

foundation, get to know new letters…and so on.

English reading, conversation, composition, pronunciation,

listening are my major subject.

My English teacher inspired me a lot! She encouraged me to join the test.

I have participated Global English test in 2009.

She gave me affirm, and I pass it. It’s worth to me to join,

because has more certificates are very useful in my future.

I hope I can further pass the TOEIC test someday!

Update:

I’m interested in English, because I hope that I can speak English very fluently

and go abroad with my family to travel someday!

Update 2:

I wish to be a travel guide in the future. Because I like to travel, especially the U.S.A, Japan. I’m glad that I study foreign languages, I learned lots of English phrases, letters, sentences,

Update 3:

in addition to all above that class main subjects,

I’ve learned American and European culture, history,

and the most important is that I selected the “international etiquette” course,

Update 4:

it can know about in different culture and places should be do something,

it’s very important,

because some countries has itself taboo,

Therefore, we can’t be discrete!

Update 5:

I’ll more hard from now on and learn more languages,

and make my dream come true! Also,

I’ll all-prepare to overcome all difficult I may face every challenge in my future!

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  • 1 decade ago
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    靚女你早我一天生日吔,哇咔咔!! 我亂改的,只供參考,不對可以自己再改改! 如有不便之處,敬請原諒!!

    My name is Chen Szu-Yu, and my English name is Jenny. I was born in

    Taipei , on August

    13th, 1992. There are five members in my family, including my

    grandmother, parents, younger sister, and me. We belong to the

    third generation in the family! My father is a businessman who is

    my role model, he always says “ Time is money! Nothing is more

    important than the time!” As a consequence, it taught me a lesson.

    If I have an appointment with my friends, I will not be late.

    Simultaneously, my father is very frugal. He will use all the things until

    those are totally broken. My mother is an earnest housewife. There

    is no doubt that she has become the great chef of my family! She

    always cooks a lot of dishes that I have never tried. For example, squid and

    field snails with garlic. I like this dish very much. As for my

    sister, she’s very smart. She can always calm down and find the way home every

    time she got lost.I can’t endure that if I miss the way home, I’ll become very

    irritable and Agitated!

    2010-06-01 21:44:06 補充:

    For this, I am supposed to learn more from my sister.My family has been my good companion in joy and in sorrow all the time.As soon as we have leisured time in weekend, we will go to temple and have a walk.I graduated from ChingShuei elementary school and junior high school.

    2010-06-01 21:45:00 補充:

    Now, I ‘m studying in my third year in the Department of Applied Foreign Language of De-Lin institute of Technology. English is my major,and Japanese is my second major.

    2010-06-01 21:46:07 補充:

    In these three years,I’ve learned how to read an article, write a composition, strengthen my English foundation, get to know new letters…and so on.English reading, conversation, composition, pronunciation,listening are my major subjects.

    2010-06-01 21:46:41 補充:

    My English teacher inspired me a lot! She encouraged me to join the test.I had participated in Global English test in 2009.She gave me affirm, and I passed it. It’s worthwhile for me to join,

    2010-06-01 21:46:46 補充:

    because I can get more certificates and they will be useful in my future.I hope I can further pass the TOEIC test someday!

    2010-06-01 22:16:03 補充:

    I’m interested in English, because I hope that I can speak English very fluently

    and go travelling with my family abroad someday!

    2010-06-01 22:18:59 補充:

    I wish I could be a travel guide in the future. Because I like to travel, especially the U.S.A, Japan. I’m glad that I study foreign languages, I learned lots of English phrases, vocabularies and sentences,

    2010-06-01 22:25:55 補充:

    in addition to all the above main subjects,

    I’ve learned American and European cultures, history,

    and the most important thing is that I selected the “international etiquette” course,

    2010-06-01 22:29:39 補充:

    I can get to know much about the different cultures and what we can do in other places. it’s very important,because some countries have their own taboos,

    Therefore, we can’t be discrete!

    2010-06-01 22:33:43 補充:

    From now on , I’ll press ahead with my efforts to study and learn more languages,and make my dream come true! Also,

    I’ll get ready to overcome all difficulties I may face from every challenge in my future!

    2010-06-01 22:34:21 補充:

    部份在意見那邊

    2010-06-01 22:34:42 補充:

    因為字數超過了

    Source(s): myself
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  • 1 decade ago

    你可以去下面那個部落格看看,他上面有發表很多自傳翻譯、中英履歷及求職求學相關的文章和相關資料,對你的翻譯應該滿有幫助!還有一些面談面試的要領,你可以參考喔!你若有問題也可以發問或是留言!

    部落格網址:http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com /supercanada2007/

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