土豆 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

我的英文自傳文法有哪些地方需要修改? 請指教

In the era of my parents, it's pretty great if you can graduate from junior high school. So my parents have high expectation of my education. In the hope one day I can enroll in the national school; and get a stable job after graduated. I work toward that goal and keep on learning to enrich my life and skill. In order to work in the society in the future, to put into practice what has been learned; not to fall short of my parent's cultivation and teachers' teaching.

If I have the honor of being a student of your esteemed school, I will continually enhance my English ability to accumulate my competitiveness. Before the school open, I will use the network English resources, borrowing books in the library, reading foreign language magazine, and so on to study English. In the hearing aspect, is especially the place which I must enhance. At the same time, this is also a preparation for the TOEIC test. In addition, in the second foreign language choice, I have chosen Spanish which is one of the three big languages in the world. I believe it will give me lots of benefits in the future. After the school open, I will spare no effort in the class, and the top five also will be my target. On the other hand, I hope to be active in the association activities, which make me not only be able to study, but also be skilled in the extracurricular activity, what is more, I can obtain the communication skills and interpersonal relationship. Before the graduation, I must achieve the 850分(不知怎寫) in the TOEIC test, which is the goal that I set. I believe I will obtain a lot of benefits from the process before I achieve the goal.

In the future, I will use what I have learned in my coming vocation, and I will find my own field. Some day in the future, will I be the foreign language talented person who has the specialized accomplishment.

請各位英文達人指教 謝謝!

Update:

請幫忙指正文法的錯誤

謝謝

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  • Lily
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    1 decade ago
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    (In them day) In the era of my parents, it would be pretty great if you can graduated from junior high school. in which my parents have high expectation of my education. They hope one day I can enroll in the national school; and get a stable job after graduation. I am working toward that goal and carry on learning to enrich my skill and experience. I try to always pay attention to my studies/school work.

    Although my school work load was heavy, I still kept a balance between my studies and extracurricular activiti. Life is more than school so in my free time, I often go to my local library to read foreign language magazine/books to improve my language skills, I am also interested in Spanish, which is one of the three big languages in the world. I believe it will give me lots of benefits in the future.

    I am a mature person and I am confident that I can pursue my goals. In order to achieve them, I accept all challenges and never give up. I believe that I will continue being a responsible person. With my strong determination, I can fulfill my goals in the near future.

    With my outstanding credentials and background, I believe that I could be a good candidate in your school and it would be my honor to be able to study there. And I am sure it will help me to score at least 850 points to be eligible to enter the TOEIC test of my choice.

    The achievement of one's purpose depends largely upon one's perseverance and I know I can be successful for my future career with all of my goal and accomplishment.

    2010-05-31 05:51:40 補充:

    土豆 同學,首先恭喜你上進之心,我也喜歡英語,但總覺不妥也沒人助我,在國外生活了30年,我知道英語有多難,繼續精益求精研究, good luck!

    Source(s): 過來人......., myself
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