Please read/critique a poem I wrote. Please. :)?

I'm just a high school kid so I'm sure it's far from perfect. I'll take any constructive criticism I can get. Thanks for your time and here it is: Stop Time Stop time in Kindergarten We got to pick our nose and bake plastic food I want to live there forever Then again maybe I want to be... show more I'm just a high school kid so I'm sure it's far from perfect. I'll take any constructive criticism I can get. Thanks for your time and here it is:

Stop Time

Stop time in Kindergarten
We got to pick our nose and bake plastic food
I want to live there forever
Then again maybe I want to be a little older

Stop time and visit third grade
Never a better year
The millennium turned and things were on a roll
We still live in la-la land, naïve
Please, let me stay here

Stop time at sixth grade
A new world awaits me that’s so fun to explore
I’m making new friends, meeting new people
And developing a new way of thinking
Keep me here, where I’m still safe from reality

Stop time here, in eigth grade
Surly I’ve learned all I need to know
I’m happy and life’s secure
Kick the brakes, before the fall
Of time in my hands

Go back, Rewind I need to get out of this high school
I refuse to stay up until two to work on projects
I won’t make the top 10 percent, even if I try
Get me the hell out of here
A torture chamber from my nightmares
The whispered dreams from T.V. shows and movies are true
Cliques group together, competition far beyond average
And somehow the normal girl, gets lost in the crowd…
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