Eugene asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

校正文章文法錯誤,已先自行翻過一次

這是一篇說明概念產品的小短文,在下已有照著自己的意思寫了一次。

但恐文法及句型結構有誤,還請熱心人士不吝指教。

感謝

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The electricity meter are often set in the public area. We can only find out how much we should pay for the electricity when the bill arrived. So, we have an idea of setting up an electricity meter at home, therefore people will be able to know how much electricity they‘ve use.

住宅中的電錶多是集中設置在公共區域,總是在每月看到電費帳單時人們才發現這個月用了多少電、該繳多少錢。因此我們有了一個將電表設置於屋內的想法,如此一來,人們便能隨時隨地知道他們用了多少電。

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The wind mill often represent an image of environmental protection(環保). We decided to use the wind mill as an interface to tell people how much power they have used. The more power people used, the faster the wind mill will turned.

風車通常予人環保的意象,我們於是決定以風車作為一個介面告訴人們他們用了多少電。使用越多的電,則更多的風扇會越轉越快。

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People don’t notice (stare at? ) the clock all the time, once they felt the time is running out, they will turn to the clock , in order to know what time it is. Just like the clock, the main concept of 'Turning Turning' is to visualize the losing of the power, and to evoke people’s attention on saving the energy. It is a quiet and yet powerful communication that makes you understand something before you are aware of it.

人們平時並不會留意到掛在牆上的時鐘,而當感覺到時間消失時,人自然會抬起頭看牆上的鐘,重新抓住時間感,就如同時鐘一樣, '轉轉(產品名稱)' 喚醒人們體悟節約能源覺,同時和鐘一樣自然而然、只在我們需要的時候給予適當的指標資訊。

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Furthermore, users can find out how much they should pay by touching the metal part. The cost of the electricity will show on the screen. Not only save the money, but also save our earth by reducing the over-use of electricity. (We wish our conceptual product will soon be published in the future.)

除此之外,使用者可以從輕觸金屬元件來得知現在應該付多少電費。電費將會顯示在螢幕上。不只省下了金錢,同時也藉由節約用電保護了我們的地球。

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  • 1 decade ago
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    修正如下,請參考。

    The electricity meters are often set in the public area, we can only always find out how much we should pay for the electricity that was used only when the bill arrives. So, we have an idea of setting up an the electricity meter at inside the home house, therefore peoplewill be able to know how much electricity they have used. (全段建議一致使用現在式)

    The A wind mill often represents an image of environmental protection(環保), for this, we decided to use the wind mill it as an interface to tell people how much power they have used. are using, (風車的轉速快慢,僅可顯示目前之用電多或少,其非數據,並無告訴人們用了”多少量的電”) because the more power the people used, the faster the wind mill will turn. (敘述一項功能,建議使用現在式)(全段建議使用現在式)

    People don’t will not notice the clock all the time, but once they feel the time is running out, they will turn raise their heads to watch the clock on the wall, in order to know to check out what time it is, just like the clock catching the main concept of time again; the ”Turning Turning” is used to visualize the losing of the power, and to evoke people’s attentions on of saving the energy, it working is a quiet and yet powerful communication as naturally as the clock does as that makes will offer you the proper index information understand something before you are aware of it when you need it.

    (全段建議一致改為現在式)

    Furthermore, the users can find out how much they should pay by touching the metal part. The cost of the electricity will be showed on the screen, which is not only save the money, but also save secure (儘量使用不同的同義文字) our Earth by reducing the over-use of electricity. (We wish our conceptual product will soon be published produced in the future.)

  • 1 decade ago

    Electricity meters are often set up in the public area. We couldn't figure out how much we should pay for the consumed electricity until the bills arrive. Therefore, we came up the idea of setting up the meters in the house so that people will be able to know how much electricity they've used any time.

    Windmills often represent image of environmental protection. We decided to use windmill as the interface to tell people how much electricity power they have used. The more they use, the faster windmills will whirl around.

    People usually don't pay any attention to the hanging clock until their time is running out. Then, they will turn to the clock to check the time. Just like the clock, the main concept of "Turning Turning" is to visualize electric power consumption, and to evoke people's attention on energy saving. It's a quiet, yet powerful communication instrument that alerts you before you are aware of its seriousness.

    Furthermore, users will easily find out how much they should pay by simply touching the metal part. Electricity consumption will show on the screen. This not only saves money, but also saves our earth by reducing electricity over-usage.

    (We wish our conceptual product will soon be materialized in the future.)

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