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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 10 years ago

英文作文的糾正

請問一下,在這一篇英文的作文裡面,有沒有文法錯的地方,或者寫不好的地方,可以給我一些建議嗎

Thank you for your last night’s reception.

Last week, my sister suddenly contacted me and told me one vital thing that my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

Suddenly, I felt cold very much.

I fear that I will lose my father, so I can realize your present mood.

I can give you some helpful suggestions.

First, you should follow doctor’s advice.

Besides, I suggest that you can buy some books related to your father’s disease.

Because the knowledge in the books will let you understand your father’s disease much, this will make you and your father have less fear.

Furthermore, the knowledge in the books will introduce how to maintain your father health, this make you know how to help your father and can tell your father some things that he should need to notice in his life, including his dies habits.

Finally, you can seek famous doctors from famous hospitals by means of network.

You can take your father to let these doctors diagnose.

My suggestion is that you can consult different doctor’s opinions.

Then, you make a further decision which is optimal to your father.

I hope that your father can soon restore his health.

Update:

po上去之後怪怪的,我再重po一次

Update 2:

Thank you for your last night's reception.

Last week, my sister suddenly contacted me and told me one vital thing that my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

Suddenly, I felt cold very much.

I fear that I will lose my father, so I can realize your present mood.

Update 3:

I can give you some helpful suggestions.

First, you should follow doctor's advice.

Besides, I suggest that you can buy some books related to your father's disease.

Update 4:

Because the knowledge in the books will let you understand your father's disease much, this will make you and your father have less fear.

Update 5:

Furthermore, the knowledge in the books will introduce how to maintain your father's health, this make you know how to help your father and can tell your father some things that he should need to notice in his life, including his dies habits..

Update 6:

Finally, you can seek famous doctors from famous hospitals by means of network.

You can take your father to let these doctors diagnose.

My suggestion is that you can consult different doctor's opinions.

Update 7:

Then, you make a further decision which is optimal to your father.

I hope that your father can soon restore his health.

Update 8:

不好意思,不是dies habits ,而是Diet habits

Update 9:

Question 1

你好,

你將

Thank you for your last night's reception.

改成

Thank you for your reception last night.

可否跟我講一下你為什麼要這樣改

Update 10:

Question 2

你將

Last week, my sister suddenly contacted me and told me one vital thing that my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

改成

Last week, my sister contacted me suddenly and told me one vital thing --- my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

Update 11:

然後我想問一下,

Suddenly是副詞,副詞不是應該要放在動詞contacted的前面嗎

--- my father has been checked to have rectum cancer

這種寫法我第一次看過,你可不可以解釋一

Update 12:

Question 3

Last week, my sister suddenly contacted me and told me one vital thing that my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

對於這一句而言,

你的看法是,

has been checked 我覺得應該改成was checked 是被檢查出來的意思

Update 13:

可是我的看法是,have +p.p.是代表,已經,而be動詞+動詞(was checked),此正是你說的,即was checked 是被檢查出來的意思,然後把have +p.p.與be動詞+動詞(was checked)結合起來,即為has been checked,代表已經被…,不知道你對我這樣的看法,有什麼意見,還是你另外其它的看法

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  • 10 years ago
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    Thank you for your reception last night.

    Last week, my sister contacted me suddenly and told me one vital thing --- my father has been checked to have rectum cancer.

    Suddenly, I felt very cold.

    I am afraid that I will lose my father, so I can understand your present mood.

    I can give you some helpful suggestions.

    First, you should follow the doctor's advice.

    Besides, I suggest that you can buy some books about your father's

    disease.

    Because the information in the books will help you understand your father's

    disease more, and this will make you and your father fearless.

    Furthermore, the information in the books will tell you how to take good care

    of your father's health, which helps you to know how to help your father ,and

    you can tell your father some things that he needs to keep an eye on in his life, including his dies habits.. (很抱歉,我不知道dies habits 指的是甚麼,請補充)

    Finally, you can look for famous doctors from famous hospitals by using the

    Internet.

    You can take your father to let these doctors diagnose.

    My suggestion is that you can adopt different doctors' opinions.

    Then, you should make a further decision which is optimal to your father.

    I hope that your father can soon be cured.

    以上是我個人的修正...

    還請多多指教...

    2010-02-06 09:50:56 補充:

    對不起喔

    ' 都是 '

    打完不知為甚麼變這樣...

    2010-02-06 22:06:31 補充:

    是diet habits 啊...

    那我覺得這邊應該不用改喔

    2010-02-07 17:02:52 補充:

    不好意思Q1我不知道該如何解釋

    Q2應該是兩種寫法都可以,我比較喜歡後者

    has been checked 我覺得應該改成was checked 是被檢查出來的意思

    還有,diet habits 改成eating habits, 後面再加sleeping hours,etc. 因為我覺得including應該列舉不只一樣...

    如有錯誤尚請海涵

    並請多多指教...

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