Socrates asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 10 years ago

Does this poem capture the essence of "Cat"?

... house cat, to be precise. That was my intention.

Does the layout work? -- the internal rhyme?

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            "Cat-"

Cat-

rageous

that

   stages stealth itself as immobile

   as the Sphinx of old while prey yet bold

   feels piercing eyes that stop it cold --

as on coiled air Cat pounces --

there! (oooooooooohhhhhhhh...allllMOST!)

Cat

pauses

licks

   paws its poise apparent toe to tail

   not a hint of shame no foil aflame

   just placid patience for the game

now still keen ears faint stirings

hear (thudump...thump..thudump)

Cat

senses

that

   thence is coming lumbering human

   to the grand armchair taboo when bare

   but filled with lap it's Cat's to share

with leaping grace Cat takes its

place (a swirl of fur that

magically transforms into

one long sonorous

infinite felinity

of purrrrrr....)

© 1999, 2010 Paul Amorose

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  • Tony h
    Lv 7
    10 years ago
    Best Answer

    Brilliant! Thank you for a truly beautiful poem.

    "with leaping grace Cat takes its

    place (a swirl of fur that

    magically transforms into

    one long sonorous

    infinite felinity

    of purrrrrr....)"

    That is one of the best things I've ever read on the cat-scene - luscious English.

    Have you read "Milk for the Cat" by Harold Munro? You both know your Cats.

  • 4 years ago

    I read this twice. The way you layer longer story-related prose is admirable, and something I have much trouble with. You make it seem effortless, natural, but all of us who write know the opposite is true. I often measure the effectiveness of a piece by the number of TD's........Jealousy rears it's green head. Kudos to you, Mr Carney.

  • Anonymous
    10 years ago

    I feel like a pussssy for answering

    a poem about cats and such, but

    hey....

    since I now have my second cat

    (my first ever croaked of a mild brain disorder)

    I catnot say I cat'nt relate.

    and cat hairs in my

    marscapone I catn't deny.

    Fine Cat Poem !

    .

    .

    Source(s): My Cat and taboo places.
  • jenny
    Lv 7
    10 years ago

    I could vision the movement, for sure.

    Not a cat house lover, but a cat watcher, enjoy

    watching their antics from my window,

    they stray onto my property.

    Nice pen.

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  • 10 years ago

    Well I don't know how it hold essence of housecat, because to me, it seem to be more tiger or other predator cats.

  • Anonymous
    10 years ago

    I think it's lovely, wild, and quite unique. Superb imagery and wordplay. Love it!

    !

  • 10 years ago

    ...I love it!

    .all the while

    when I am

    rehearsing to relax

    you can hear me

    chanting

    '..be the cat..be the cat..

  • 10 years ago

    As a cat lover I think this is great. To me, it is original and creative. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

  • Anonymous
    10 years ago

    oh, i think t.s. eliot would even feel a bit of joy at this...cats were really his only joyful thing in life...

  • 10 years ago

    No, not really, the format is odd, and the language less than fresh.

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