winnie asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

請幫我修正英文文法,thanks!!!!!

Have you ever listened to a song and felt it absolutely touched your heart?

I'm still looking for it.

Music is indisipensable in my life.

It accompanies me for most of the time.

It can make me calm when I feel sad.

It can make me feel hopeful when I depressed.

It can be my good friend when I alone.

That's why even though many things have been changing or displacing,music is still improving and becoming more popular.

Update:

謝謝你的建議!!

請問一下為什麼問句都是現在式呢?

Have you ever listen to a song ........這句我想用現在完成式的話,listen不需要改成listened嗎?

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  • 1 decade ago
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    你的文章本身是好的,錯誤很少。我絲毫不用作大更動。真正的文法與標點錯誤必須改正的,只有 felt it,for most of time,I depressed,why even though 而已。其他都是為了語意清晰而改。同時我按文意將文章分為三個段落,這樣,整篇文章既清晰又嚴謹,是一篇好短文。

    Have you ever listened to a song and felt that it absolutely touched your heart?

    I'm still looking for a song like that.

    Music is indispensable in my life. It accompanies me most of the time. It can make me happy when I am sad. It can make me feel hopeful when I am depressed. It can be my good friend when I am alone.

    That's why, even though many things have changed or disappeared, music is still improving and becoming more popular.

    你的第一句前段是好的,意思也很明確,只要在 felt 後面加上 that 就完全正確。it absolutely touched your heart 是滿好的一個子句,但要有 that 才能清楚地做 felt 的受詞。至於你補充所問「為什麼問句都是現在式呢?」,不要受到誤導,你的句子是對的。

    第二句 still looking for it. 的 it 是代名詞,指什麼呢?語意不清。寫英文文章,用代名詞要小心,因為代名詞使用不當,讀者不知所指為何? 改為 still looking for a song like that. 就很清楚,that 是指第一句所講的那種歌。

    「大部分時間」是 most of the time 前面不需要 for。

    sad 與 calm 不成對比,happy 和 sad 才成對比。 「傷心」直接說 when I am sad 就行,沒有必要強調 feel ,因為下一句又是 feel ,英文作文盡量不要反覆使用同一個字。

    when I depressed 要改成 when I am depressed.

    最後一句,why even though 不好。這句的主要子句應該是 That's why music is still improving and becoming more popular, 而 even though.......disappeared 只是補充的子句,所以前後都要有逗號。

    我不知道原文 displacing 是要表達什麼意思,改成 disappeared,表示雖然很多事物已經改變或者被淘汰而消失,但音樂仍然一直在改進甚至更受歡迎。

    最後,even though 的子句只是在敘述別的事物的情況,不需要用進行式。

    Source(s): me-蘿蔔絲
  • hannah
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    1 decade ago

    1. Have ....... felt it absolutely touched your heart?

    .............felt it absolutely touched in your heart?

    feel後接形容詞(過去分詞touched做形容詞)

    此處touch非動詞 故其後不可直接接受詞my heart.

    2. It accompanies me for most of the time.

    It ..........me most of the time.

    for 加一段時間 通常用於完成式

    3. It can make me feel hopeful when I depressed.

    .......................................when I feel depressed.

    depressed是過去分詞做形容詞. interested/excied/touched

    4. It can be my good friend when I alone.

    .......................when I am alone.

    alone為形容詞.子句內需要有動詞

    5. That is why even though many things have been changing or displacing,

    music is still improving and becoming more popular.

    That's why even though many things have been changed and

    replaced, ..........

    許多事物被改變被取代.故用被動式

    2010-01-11 08:42:33 補充:

    Have youn ever listened to .....

    完成式必須是 have/has 加 過去分詞

  • 1 decade ago

    Have you ever listen to a song and feel absolutely touch into your heart?

    I am still looking for it.

    It accompanies me for most of the time.

    It can make me calm when I feel sad.

    It can make me feel hopeful when I depressed.

    It can be my good friend when I am alone.

    That's why even though many things have been changing,music is still getting more and more popular.

    我替你稍微修改了一下

    問句上的動詞記得都是用現在式

    然後最後一句我懂你要表達的意思 但我們一般不會用那麼多動詞去形容一件事或放在同一句裡

    另外盡量多用一些別的詞來開頭 如果每句都是It或I開頭會顯的有點單調

    也可以加點Moreover, besides之類的在開頭

    希望能幫到你

    Source(s): 自己是留學生
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