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HPfan7 asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

What do you think of this poem?

And comments and criticism are welcome. Thanks in advance!

To knock me to the ground,

When you knew I was already there,

A heartless feat, merciless,

You’d have to be you to do it.

To desert me, to leave me,

And run off with the others,

A cold feat, childish.

You’d have to be you to do it.

To laugh in the face of justice,

And laugh in the face of me,

A stupid feat, naïve,

You’d have to be you to do it.

To go with the ones who are shady,

Ones you know you cannot trust,

A wrong feat, blind.

So you’d have to be you to do it.

And to stare me in the eyes,

As if you’ve done nothing wrong,

A shameless feat, innocent,

So of course you’d have to be you to do it.

5 Answers

  • 1 decade ago
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    this is really really good. it really spoke to the reader. it's lyrical, like poetry should be, but it's also very understandable. amazing job. keep up the good work! :)

    Source(s): myself
  • 1 decade ago

    Really good! you have a really great talent...there were some points that i couldnt understand but it might have just been me not you! great job girl =D

  • 1 decade ago

    that is really good! i really like it a lot! good job :)

  • 1 decade ago
    Source(s): peace ! ; : 0 )
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  • 1 decade ago

    good; good

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