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Is my text correct? I am French !?

Is my text correct? How could it be improved? I am French

"Directed by Anton Corbijn and starring Sam Riley, Samantha Morton and Alexandra Maria Lara, Control is a brilliant musical and true drama set in between Manchester and Macclesfield in England in the late 1970's during punk's time. The main character is Ian Curtis (played by Sam Riley) the singer of the band called Joy Division. This band was like a bombshell in that time since Joy Divison is not a punk band, but a cold-wave one. By that word, we mean that Joy Division was not one by the way they played, they did not scream and move from beginnng to endd of the stage as punks used to do. Nevertheless, they were influenced by punk bands in so far as they didn't know how to play any instrument when they began to play together (they learnt as rehearsals proceed). Joy Division existed from 1977 to 1980."

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Directed by Anton Corbijn and starring Sam Riley, Samantha Morton and Alexandra Maria Lara, Control is a brilliant musical based on a true drama that occurred between Manchester and Macclesfield in England during punk music of the late 1970's. The main character is Ian Curtis (played by Sam Riley) the singer of the band called Joy Division. The band was like a bombshell in that time since Joy Divison was not a punk band but a cold-wave one. By that word, I mean that Joy Division did not scream and move across the stage as punks used to do. Nevertheless, they were influenced by punk bands in so far as they did not know how to play any instruments when they began to play together; they learned as rehearsals proceeded. Joy Division existed from 1977 to 1980.

    je le trouve bien écrit, le tien; voilà ce que j'ai pu faire pour t'aider...

  • 1 decade ago

    i will put all my editing in " ", including spelling

    Directed by Anton Corbijn and starring Sam Riley, Samantha Morton and Alexandra Maria Lara, Control is a brilliant musical and true drama set in between Manchester and Macclesfield in England in the late 1970's during punk's time. The main character is Ian Curtis (played by Sam Riley)",(COMMA)" the singer of the band called Joy Division. This band was like a bombshell in that time",COMMA" "because" Joy Divison "was" not a punk band, but a cold wave one. By that word, we mean that Joy Division was not "defined" by the way they played, "meaning" they did not scream and move from "beginning" to "end" of the stage as punks used to do. Nevertheless, they were influenced by punk bands "that were popular in that period". "None of the members knew" how to play any instrument when they began to play together (they "learned" as rehearsals proceed). Joy Division "played" from 1977 to 1980.

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    ...Ian Curtis, the singer of...

    ...in that time, because Joy Division was not a...

    ...Joy Division was not defined...

    ...they played, meaning they did not...

    ...move from beginning to end of the stage...

    ...punk bands that were popular in the time period. None of the members knew how to play...

    ...they learned as rehearsals...

    ...Joy Division played from...

    In French:

    je mettrai toute mon montage dans "", dont la graphie

    Réalisé par Anton Corbijn et avec Sam Riley, Samantha Morton et Alexandra Maria Lara, le contrôle est un drame musical brillant et vrai instauré entre Manchester et à Macclesfield en Angleterre à la fin des années 1970, pendant le temps du punk. Le personnage principal est Ian Curtis (interprété par Sam Riley) ", (virgule)" la chanteuse du groupe appelé Joy Division. Ce groupe est devenu comme une bombe à cette époque ", virgule" "parce que" Joy Division "n'était" pas un groupe punk, mais une vague de froid. Par ce mot, nous voulons dire que Joy Division n'était pas «définie» par la façon dont ils ont joué », qui signifie« ils ne crie pas et de passer de «commencement» à «fin» de la scène comme les punks habitude de faire. Néanmoins, ils ont été influencé par des groupes punk "qui étaient populaires dans cette période". «Aucun des membres savent" comment jouer d'un instrument quand ils ont commencé à jouer ensemble (ils «appris», comme les répétitions à mesure). Joy Division "joué" de 1977 à 1980.

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    ... Ian Curtis, le chanteur de ...

    ... à ce moment-là, parce que Joy Division n'était pas a. ..

    ... Joy Division n'était pas définie ...

    ... ils ont joué, ce qui signifie qu'ils n'ont pas ...

    ... passer du début à la fin de la scène ...

    ... des groupes punk qui étaient populaires dans la période de temps. Aucun des membres savaient jouer ...

    ... ils ont appris que des répétitions ...

    ... Joy Division a joué à partir du ...

    fit a la traduction dans l'aide en français? S'il vous plaît laissez-le moi savoir en anglais. Français me donne le vertige.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Liar/Coward/Punk/***

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