Ace asked in Entertainment & MusicMusicLyrics · 1 decade ago

Tell me your honest opinion of my song lyrics plz?

VERSE 1:

Hope is dead,

Crushed to dust under the weight of your,

Wicked infidelity,

Ripped my heart to shreds,

Now it’s bleeding out the truth and I,

Think I finally see,

CHORUS:

You were never home,

And I would wait by the phone,

For you to call,

You’d say you were out with the guys,

That was just more of your lies,

As I recall,

I hope she touched and ****** you just right,

‘Cause you were out almost every night,

But I shouldn’t care anymore,

Cause you left me for that whore,

But the feelings still remain that I can’t ignore,

VERSE 2:

Now I’m numb,

No longer a yell but now a hum,

I hate what I’ve become,

Smiles are rare,

I am broken and beyond repair,

Now I reside in despair,

CHORUS

ENDING:

Now you’re gone and I’m alone,

I guess I really should’ve known,

What was right in front of my face,

Hope is dead,

Crushed to dust under the weight of your,

Wicked infidelity….

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  • 1 decade ago
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    this is actually super good. the only thing i would say is that you use very common words together like "repair" and "despair." good job though! =)

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  • Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    I like the first verse only. The rest is too straightforward, not poetic enough.

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  • fout
    Lv 4
    3 years ago

    Oh! i like it! am i able to apply it in my e book? it particularly is beautiful! in between the chapters the biggest character sings a track and that's what I wantedd the track to sense like! you arew so cool! call sugestion:Why Do i think this sort

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  • 1 decade ago

    great for an emo song

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