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靜夜 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

幫我改英文作文~

My Hobby

My hobby is drawing.I have taken up drawing since I was young.In my leisure time,I like to draw everything beside me.Actually,monsters are the things I often draw.I think monster is a unique thing.There are many kinds of monsters I image in my mind and I always draw them out.I also will

assume where the monster live in.

Drawing have some advantages.First,drawing can delivery what I am thinking about.I can turn what I think in my mind into pictures.Then,I can share the pictures with many people.Drawing is a invisible bridge let me communicate with people.Second,sometimes when I am alone,I draw pictures.Drawing is not only make me happy but also help me release my emotions.For instance,I release my anger in my pictures by drawing a monster which is destorying the houses.Gradually,I could feel better in this way.

Drawing is a good activity.How about joining me and sharing the pictures with each other ?

由內容(5分).

組織(5分).

文法(4分).

用字拼字(4分).

標點符號(2分).總分20分

幫我改我可以得幾分.並幫我指出我的文法錯誤或拼字錯誤.

感謝^ ^

Update:

Drawing have some advantages for me .

have要改成has嗎?

(我是高中要考大學的程度)

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    稍微刪修如下,括弧內的字可省略 。至於打分數很難,還得考慮你的年級(學多久) ,如果非打不可 ,總分20分的話我會打16分。

    My Hobby

    My hobby is drawing pictures .I have taken (up) drawing since I was young.In my leisure time,I like to draw everything beside me.Being unique in my mind, actually,monsters are the things I often draw.There are many kinds of monsters in my mind and I always draw them out.I also assume where the monster live .

    Drawing have some advantages for me .First,drawing can express what I think.I can turn what I think (in my mind) into pictures.Then,I can share the pictures with many people.Drawing is an invisible bridge by which I can communicate with people.Second,sometimes when I am alone,I draw pictures.Drawing is not only make me happy but also help me release my emotions.For instance,I release my anger by drawing a monster which is destorying houses.In this way,I could gradually feel better .

    Drawing is a good hobby.How about joining me in drawing so that we can share the pictures with each other ?

    2009-11-12 04:17:00 補充:

    是的,應改用has,因為主詞 Drawing 是第三人稱又是單數。

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