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My name is Dean, I was born on September 17, 1985, and my star sign is Libra (inhuman and not animal sign). There are four people in my family, including my father, my mother, my little brother, and me. My hobbies are listening to music, seeing movies with friends and drawing. My favorite singers are Sarah... show more My name is Dean, I was born on September 17, 1985, and my star sign is Libra (inhuman and not animal sign). There are four people in my family, including my father, my mother, my little brother, and me.

My hobbies are listening to music, seeing movies with friends and drawing. My favorite singers are Sarah Brightman, Sarah McLachlan, Westlife, Sweetbox, Phil Collins and Hayley Westenra (too many ohh)!My favorite performers are Gong Li, Richard Gere, Meryl Streep, Kate Winslet, Michael Weatherly and Glenn Close. I’m interested in movie “ Revolutionary Road ” and “Orphan” recently.

I’m studying in National Taitung Junior College with a major of Architecture. Architectural design and English are my favorite subjects. I like color pencil, specifically brand “Faber-Castell”. When I’m free, I will draw and listen to music, try to make a short story (of course agreement to turn off the radio), or read alone.

Recently, I read “ Revolutionary Road ” and “Chasing Harry Winston”, I have ever read “The Devil Wears Prada”, written by Lauren Weisberger who is also the of “Chasing Harry Winston”. If I can’t be an architect in the future, I also have interest in written; I believe handwriting has a closer feelings (and show ones character, more or less), and I want to make progress in English, I learn to translate lyrics into Chinese.


My short-term goal is to enter National Taipei University of Technology, Department of Architecture in two years later. My long-term plan is to emigrate to Canada and travel to somewhere like England , France , Italy , and the United States of America . Eventually I have a smooth and steady life.
Update: 請問你是有改什麼地方嗎?
Update 2: To:喜貓
Try to make a short story 嘗試創作短篇小說
Of course agreement to turn off the radio 當然得先關掉收音機(音樂)
Or read alone 或一個人閱讀

如果以上三句都不正確,請問應如何修改較好?
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