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Computers are very popular in the progressing society we now live in as most people have at least one computer in their homes. Research shows that teenagers spend a minimum of four hours on computer actives everyday. They regard computers as essential everyday equipments and the lack of it would result in boredom and nothing to do. However it is in my opinion that spending time on computers is a waste of time and the knowledge and benefits gained are extremely limited.

There are several reasons why people like to spend time on computers. Facebook, Myspace or any other blogs are very popular nowadays in which it causes one to spend excessive amount of time on browsing them. These websites provide teenagers with a past-time and amusement as friends can be made on these websites and also events and emotions can be shared. An online game is another reason why people use the computer. Online games create a fantasy world where you can find treasures or make your own money just through a click of a mouse. Playing online games may serve as an entertainment and stress relief yet in the long term; it is very futile and time-consuming.

Although it is an unavoidable fact that the majority of people have at least one computer at home, there are still ways of spending time constructively without having to consult the computer. Instead of viewing websites in order to do research, the library is a useful place to do the exact same thing yet with ten times as much gain. In addition, something more meaningful like going outside can be done to reduce the hours spent on playing online games or doing anything as vain as that. Online games are built upon fantasies, dreams and non-existent exultations, therefore times spent on it should be kept to a minimum. Don't waste away your years on computers because it's just not worth it.

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Through those evidence, I really believe using computer waste people a lot of time, the only thing you benefit from computer is the happiness time for little while. Consequently, one should not spend excessive amount of time on computers because it would not benefit to you.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    其實你的英文已經好到不需要太多改正了

    我只幫你改一些小小的文法或加入一些字 讓文句更順暢

    希望能幫上你!

    Computers are very popular in the progressing society we now live in as most people have at least one computer in their homes. Research shows that teenagers spend a minimum of four hours on computer activities everyday. They regard computers as essential part of their lives and the lack of it would result in boredom and lethargy. However it is in my opinion that spending too much time on computers is useless and the knowledge and benefits gained are extremely limited.

    2009-09-16 19:32:59 補充:

    These websites provides teenagers with a past-time and source of entertainment.

    2009-09-16 19:33:56 補充:

    as friends can be made on these websites and also events and emotions can be shared.

    2009-09-16 19:36:08 補充:

    Playing online games is another reason why people use computers. Online games create a fantasy and imaginative world where you can find treasures or make your own money just by a click of the mouse.

    2009-09-16 21:58:07 補充:

    Don't waste away your time on computers because it is just unworthy.

    2009-09-16 21:59:08 補充:

    the only thing you benefit from computer is a short period of happiness.

    2009-09-16 22:00:49 補充:

    除了我放上去的答案你可以參考以外

    其他的就沒有什麼問題

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