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title : do you believe that first impressions are accurate?

content :

I do not think first impressions accurate. For the sake of notions from other people, what is a rule everyone make it to as often or not is that we disguise our true personality when meeting a new friend. It is a way to prevent us from badly getting along with others as of so. But, on the contrary, we may misunderstand a person’s true characteristic in the wake of the disguise owing to the first-impressed stereotype.

Acting on my experience on the first day of junior high school, a new teacher to new class acted solemnly in order to set ample prestige. Such a serious teacher was he that I was really scared. But as time went by, he appeared that he was not strict at all.

I also found first impression inaccurate.

All in all, first impressions could only be a reference but far from a definite direction.

麻煩 請英文高手 幫我訂正 畢竟 學測 迫在眉睫 英檢中高級 也即將來臨 也希望 能有好心 人士 能夠撥空 幫我改英文作文

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另外 勿以 翻譯網站 直接貼上去 那樣我也會

還有 如果這是學測大慨能得幾分呢? 拜託 各位

Update:

中文意思? 代表 說 我寫的讓人看不懂囉?

中文意思如下

我不認為第一印象是準確的 當認識一個新朋友時 為了別人的觀感

我們習慣於掩飾我們真正的個性 這使我們在以後能和他人好好相處

但是相對而言 在掩飾後我們會由於第一印象的刻板印象而錯知別人的真正特質

根據我國中上課第一天的經驗 一個老師 為了 豎立足夠的威望對他新的學生而言 一舉一動都很嚴肅 老師是這樣的嚴肅以致於我當時有點嚇到

但隨著時間流逝 他其實並不嚴肅 我也發現第一印象並不準確

總而言之 第一印象 只能當參考 而絕不是一個明確的指標

Update 2:

For σνεяςəά ¢øηαп ғǎи

我知道您一字一字都寫的很好但只是把我想表達的意思 重新整篇表達出來 似乎失去了 改的意義 例如像

Acting on 被改成According to 所以我想知道 這兩個"根據"有什麻差別麼?

Update 3:

achieve ample prestige 和 set ample prestige 是習慣上用語嗎?一定要用

achieve ample prestige嗎?

Update 4:

還有您說的第一句看不懂 是只一開頭的那一句還是第二句那個很長感覺不出重點的句子呢?

Update 5:

I discovered first impressions are not accurate at all.

I also found first impressions inaccurate.

這兩句話有什麼差別嗎? 是found 後面不能直接加 inaccurate嗎?

Update 6:

恩 是我中文意思的錯 我也覺得用"根據"在英文 感覺有一點死死的感覺?

那如果 不用"根據" 要用哪個字 會比較好表達呢? 直接用我有一則經驗嗎?

Update 7:

well, there is still working on your answer

I still need to impress my sentences more clearly; I try to think the expressions between yours and mine.

Thank you! you are really a nice mentor = )

Update 8:

hide our true self

disguise our true self

那這兩句的動詞的差別呢

是因為 hide 比較自然嗎?

Update 9:

我還是有點不懂

Active voice and passive vioce

給人的感覺 因為discover 和 find 中文翻譯 都是發現

我真的很不能體會

不過 我覺得 第二次 在修改的那句 很精采

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  • weiwei
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    1 decade ago
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    你可以把中文寫上來嗎? 我看不是很懂...

    2009-09-12 16:13:52 補充:

    I do not believe first impressions are accurate. It is part of our human nature that we try to hide our true self when we meet new people. It is for the sake of creating a good impression of ourselves as it allows us to get along with other people better.

    However, there is a possibility of misunderstanding one's true personality due to the stereotypical image we have already created at the start.

    According to my experence on the first day of junior high school, a new teacher to the school acted strict in order to achieve ample prestige. His seriousness at the time intimidated me, however as time went by, his solemn attitude began to fade away and it was then that I discovered first impressions are not accurate at all.

    All in all, first impressions can only be used as a reference, it can not be regarded as the definite indicator at determining one's true character.

    (sorry...I couldnt understand your first sentence..so I thought if you post up the chinese translation, it would be easier for me to check it.)

    2009-09-13 07:41:26 補充:

    'acting on' and 'according to' have two different meanings. You might want to search up the meaning of those two words. I was hesistant to use 'according to' as well because I didn't think it made sense in that sentence. But since your Chinese translation meant that, I just put it in.

    2009-09-13 07:43:08 補充:

    I was only trying to make the essay more sophisticated in the whole...but it seems like it didn't quite work huh...=/

    2009-09-13 07:49:00 補充:

    'set ample prestige' just didn't make sense to me...? because 'prestige' means authority, prominence at school...so you can't 'set' authority, you have to 'achieve' it or 'gain' it. But if you really want to have that connotation..then I guess you can put 'construct a strict image' or something?

    2009-09-13 07:49:05 補充:

    I don't know how to use 'set' though other than 'set a good example'

    2009-09-13 07:51:16 補充:

    oh sorry I meant I couldn't understand the 2nd sentence..I didn't know what you were trying to say.

    2009-09-13 07:53:19 補充:

    sorry I didn't see that you used 'inaccurate' but yes you can use that word. I changed 'found' to 'discover' because I thought it was a better word to use..? By all means change it back if you don't like it. Or you can use 'realise'

    2009-09-13 07:54:42 補充:

    sorry I would like to change that sentence..if you dont mind.

    "His seriousness at the time intimidated me, however as time went by, his solemn attitude began to fade away and it lead to my discovery that first impressions are inaccurate."

    2009-09-13 07:55:56 補充:

    Because you're writing an essay, it would be better to use passive voice, instead of active voice. But I don't know, it really depends on how formal this writing is supposed to be.

    Hope I cleared your confusion. =]

    2009-09-13 12:07:49 補充:

    hm...did this thing like delete some of my later responses...? = = I'm gonna write it in the comments section now.. :D

    2009-09-13 12:10:02 補充:

    if you didnt receive this before, I changed 'found' to 'discover' coz I thought it was a better word there...since it's an essay, try to use passive voice instead of active voice. but it really depends on how formal this writing is supposed to be.

    2009-09-13 12:18:07 補充:

    Yea, instead of 'according to' you can use like 'based on an experience in junior high' or something.. that is probably better. And you can use disguise there sorry. Coz i've only ever used 'disguise' when connoting 'pretending'.

    cheers

    2009-09-13 20:15:57 補充:

    Yeah 'discover' and 'find' both have the same meaning but I would use 'discover' if I was writing this..? It really depends. Because you're writing an essay...to me, 'find' is just not that formal..? That's what I think..

    2009-09-13 20:24:05 補充:

    passive voice in a sentence is when the subject is subjected to the verb/action (so the subject receives the action) where as in active voice, the subject is the actor of the verb (so the subject gives the action)

    2009-09-13 20:27:20 補充:

    so for example,

    'the dog bit it" is active voice, the dog is the subject and the dog is doing the verb(the dog is biting it)

    "it was bitten by the dog" is passive voice, the dog is the subject but this time the dog receives the action (was bitten BY the dog)

    2009-09-13 20:28:19 補充:

    I think that's right...=/ but yea passive voice is more formal than active voice so I would suggest you to use passive voice when writing essays.

    Source(s): me, myself and I
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