Elysabeth asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

What are your comments on 'Was This Poem Written?' morning ? poem?

The poem was visualized on the front, screen porch,

in silence, in wonder, through eyes...

It swarmed the Autumn-purpled flowers by the door,

leafed through reds, golds of the Chinaberry Tree...

dripping words down Sunday wet tin,

onto the wooden steps.

The poem never stalked like Lady McBeth, through

darkness to her ending hall, last line spoken...

Never flew too close to the Sun, as Pegasus,

gathering no Phoenix rebirth...

The poem did not herald a magical Sunday.

For the poem stayed on the front porch,

and was never written.

Update:

Good Morning!

This really just now happened...it's a conundrum.

Time for another cigarette...and cup o hot coffee!

Update 2:

Sagittarius A, this is Sagittarius B...create your own mythology, no? Isn't that what poetry is all about?

Darkness and Light are realms of their own, worthy of being allotted to whoever treads them...

Update 3:

Answer: yes, this poem was written...the title threw you off...an intentional conundrum.

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  • Lola
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago
    Best Answer

    Smooth and gentle

    and

    it was written.

  • Angela
    Lv 4
    4 years ago

    You are so talented. I know I've said that before. This is a deep meaningful poem, it may be a different style than you use now but it is so good to me. Drown my soul in wash of sorrow. Build my doubts and leave me hallow. You know I adore you. I wish I could open up the way you do.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    A very enjoyable read, though the second stanza is a jumble of literary associations; surely you intended Lady Macbeth, and the myth that springs to mind in referencing overreaching aspirations of flying too close to the Sun is that of Icarus and Daedalus, non? The message was only slightly subverted by these distractions, but they are worth noting.

    Cheers

  • 1 decade ago

    well, you must have zoned in on me when you wrote this. Melancholic beauty is what I see and feel from this...my mood of late.

    Excellent write.

    Oh, the poems never written--to personal to share, those are the really good ones--if we would only dare to share.

    Good Morning to ya! (Monday morning now)

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  • 1 decade ago

    The poem may not have been written, but the

    beautiful view is a poem in itself.

    Thanks for sharing it with us.

    GM, Elys

    Cup of coffee, always a good idea. (=;

    [Tuesday morning]

  • 1 decade ago

    My best poems have been written in my head whist driving or showering and by the time I get to the paper or puter it's gone. I suppose they were meant just for me.

    This is my favorite of yours.

  • Daisy
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    Oh those poems that happen in thoughts when paper and pen are gone...hate that! This is cool...I like dripping words on tin

    Good Morning!

  • 1 decade ago

    Will your next book be "Porch Poems" (as compared to "Torch Songs")? A contemplative scene. I like it's mellow feel.

  • 1 decade ago

    Good Morning E!

    Sometimes you need to keep a poem to your self

    even when you share

  • Sometimes, my dear Poetess, things are better left in imagination than implemented in a physical level.

    Many hugs,

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