Would a network green-light this pilot episode?
This is a short script of a pilot episode i am creating for a new sitcom called Chris' Way. It is about a teenager named Chris Smith and his life growing up in Chicago.
Scene One: (in the living room of Chris's house where he talking to his parents)
Chris:Mom can i have a raise on my allowance?
Chris: Dad can i have a raise on my allowance?
Antoine: HELL NO.
Chris: Well. This SUCKS!
Antoine: That's the exact same thing i said when i saw your last report card.
Jen:(laughing) Good one daddy!
Chris: What is this? Be a jerk to Chris day?
Antione: (in a funny tone) Come on! You don't expect us to give you more money Chris. You know how irresponsible you are with it.
Chris: Dad i'm a teenager, I AM SUPPOSE TO BE IRRESPONSIBLE! If you are a responsible teenager in America, something is wrong with you!
Antione: (looks at Lisa) You know what the sad thing is? Chris actually believes every word he just said.
Jen:(shakes her head) Pathetic.
Lisa: (kisses Chris) Sorry honey. The bank of Mom and Dad is closed.(walks out the door with Antione)
Jen:(pats Chris on the face) They shut you down. (walks out the door laughing)
Chris:(angry tone) I HATE MY FAMILY.
Scene Two:(Chris is in the school lunchroom with his friends)
Chris: (slams down his lunchtray)
Mike: (in a mocking tone) Is there something bothering you Christopher?
Chris: It's my parents man. They won't give me a raise on my allowance.
Patrick:(stands up screaming) THAT IS AN OUTRAGE! (lunchroom stares at him) (Pat in a meek tone) Sorry.
Chris: It's a bunch of unfair crap!
Mike: (in a funny tone) Real Talk. But there is a way you can combat this?
Chris: (stares at Mike) How?
Mike: Get a job. Get a job dude. If you get a job, you can make your own money.
Patrick: He's right Chris. Go to work. It's the American way.
Chris: (nods in approval) Yeah! But there is one problem. Who the heck is gonna hire a 14 year old who has never worked a day in his life?
Mike: (laughing) I don't have any idea! That's for you to find out.
Patrick: (pats Chris on the shoulder)Good Job Hunting!
Scene Three: (Chris goes around town after school looking for a job and encounters crazy mishaps)
Scene Four: (Chris comes back home around 7 pm)
Chris: (walks in the house) The world is ugly. It is very, very ugly!
Lisa: Where have you been?
Jen: Probably smoking weed with his homies.
Jen: (smiles)I love being mean!
Antione: You were out looking for an afterschool job.
Chris:(stares at Antione) You mind telling me how you knew that?
Antione: I had the same dejected face, tone and demeanor when i first looked for a job. I miss my childhood. NOT!
Lisa: I'm sorry it did not work out for you son. OH WELL! Time for dinner! (she and Jen walk into the kitchen)
Antione: You know son, i'm proud of you. You just proved to me that you are willing to grind to get what you want.
Chris: Are you proud enough to give me a raise on my allowance?
Antione: (smiles and puts his arm around Chris) HELL NO!
What do you think?
I know it seems kind of short but i can't fit every single detail of it on here.
- AJLv 61 decade agoFavorite Answer
It took me a while to read this but this is actually pretty good. No offence but I thought it was going to be crap. But it's surprisingly good.
- 1 decade ago
Not bad, but I would change the main character's name. Just because he's talking about how everybody hates him, and his name is Chris, and there is already a TV show called "Everybody hates Chris" Just seems a bit similar to me, change up the name though and it will be fine.