英文面試自我介紹需修正的地方

Question

下面是要用說出來自我介紹的句子

因為用說的自我介紹和用寫的自我介紹句型有點不太一樣

能不能幫我看一下我的文法那些對不對

用說的話順不順，那些需要改的地方

感謝！！

早安各位教授

Good morning every professor.

我的名子是XXX來自彰化

My name is XXX and from Chang Hua.

今年24歲畢業於國立X大學

I am twenty four year old and graduated National X University.

我主修機械工程

I have majored in Mechanical Engineering.

我的興趣是田徑，常常代表學校參加比賽

My interest is Track and Field and often competed in internal games representing my school.

我的指導教授是XXX教授

My adviser is XXX.

來到這所別於其他機電所不一樣的地方

I have come to this place that is very different than other Mechatronics System Engineering institute.

這邊的發展是朝向醫學工程，這另我很興奮

因為我能學到機械工程以外的領域

It is expanding towards Medical Engineering. This excites me, as I will be able to learn something outside of the field of Mechanical Engineering.

在此很高興認識大家

Nice to meet you. Thank you.

Update:

那個不是校際比賽

是一些國內的比賽

能幫我改一下嗎??

謝

Update 2:

那一段的意思是

常常代表學校參加國內的田徑比賽

Answer 1

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Good morning.

My name is XXX and from Chang Hua.

I am twenty four years old and graduated National X University,

majoring in Mechanical Engineering.

My interest is Track and Field and often competing in internal games representing my school.

My adviser is XXX.

I come to this place that is very different than other Mechatronics System Engineering institute.

It is expanding towards Medical Engineering,feeling exciting. Because I will be able to learn something outside of the field of Mechanical Engineering.

Thank for your attention.

有些地方幫你改掉

多用些分詞構句跟分詞片語才可以看出你的程度

nice to meet you用在這不適當

Source(s): 我英資班

Answer 2

因中英文口語說法是不一樣的, 有的句子順序我調整過, 讓英語較順暢, 但意思ㄧ樣的.

Good morning, professors.

My name is XXX.

I am twenty four years old and I come from Chang Hua.

My major is Mechanical Engineering and graduated from National X University.

My interest is track and field and often competed in internal games representing my school. (internal games--不解, 代表內部比賽, 但若代表學校應該是校際比賽)

My adviser is XXX.

When I came to this place, I found it was different from other Mechatronics System Engineering institute which made me exciting.

It is expanding towards Medical Engineering so that I will be able to learn something more than the field of Mechanical Engineering.

It is my pleasure to meet you. Thank you.

* Nice to meet you 對教授來說不夠尊敬.

* 個人覺得你講到這個所不一樣的地方後, 馬上結束, 有點奇怪.

Source(s): 自己~英國留學