Rate my poem: "Meal of Love"?
Meal of Love
Who in the world believes
I would like to see you kissing
Bringing me to my knees
With all that I am missing
Honing your ever present skill
In the midst of my demise
Flaunting before me a tender morsel meal
In your two tones faced disguise
The feast contains an entree
Which exceeds that of the lower class
Princely fashioned poise of cookery
From which none other can surpass
A brief pause among the collation
To gather space between the portion
Lips meet again in secret hesitation
To distribute the pleasurable ration
Kneeling here among the dead roses
You have succeeded in dividing me apart
Shredding with your cleaver poses
Making a succulent meal of my heart
I had this published in my college magazine. I have been writing poetry for 20 years, and am now writing a book. Feel free to visit my website at TheManyFacesOfAutism.com I hope you enjoy one of my first successes, and any advice is welcome.
I know in the last stanza it says cleaver. I did that on purpose. I did not mean clever, but rather a cleaver pose (one that shreds). Again enjoy!
- John DLv 41 decade agoFavorite Answer
I could see a feast as a metaphor for love. It makes perfect sense. You stray off the meal in the second stanza.
"Collation" is an odd word choice. In what sense do you mean it?
I can definitely see a fan base among young, Twilight-obsessed, girls. The poem speaks to longing, dark betrayal and the anger it engenders.
As it stands, I just posted a love poem (of a kind) about a feast... perhaps you will enjoy?
- Anonymous5 years ago
Now,l am not Trying to be rude this is an Awesome Poem Dude you and me, could make a Pact and I could be Your best Contact l Really Like Your Awsome Style so, Thankyou Dude for making me Smile.
- 1 decade ago
Second the last stanza should be omitted. It makes very little sense. The rest is good. You do a good job of describing the relationship and your feelings in terms of a meal. Novel.Source(s): Check out my question! http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AnhCQ...
- SwinglineLv 51 decade ago
Meeh that sounds something a woman would say....hmmm really....Love is a meal? That's what women be thinking?...how sad?...Autism Journal?
But if it was a meal not for the lower class then I guess i will have no part in it.