Moon asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Feedback on my haiku poem?

Above golden trees

following a waning moon

a lonely moth flies

just want a little feedback...thanks

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  • 1 decade ago
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    The art of Zen Haiku poetry is to implant into the mind of the reader the essence of the experience as if it is happening in the now.

    You have succeeded. Very nice.

  • 1 decade ago

    It brings to mind a very nice image, beautiful yet a touch melancholy. I'm no great poetry buff, but I think this ones really nice. It would be great to see more of your work, whether it's haiku or not.

    Source(s): Only my english classes.
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Beautiful

    Just beautiful.

    This haiku's simplicity

    renders my soul into

    a dream where I can

    see the lonely moth

    swimming in the rays

    of moonlight following

    her whereever this river

    of love may lead.

    good poem.

  • 1 decade ago

    haikus are short,but can be made very detailed. maybe more of an image. try si jos

    nice poem though

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  • Leenie
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    I LOVE IT. it brings a blip of a beautiful scene, and that is what i love about haiku.

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