is this peom good i just wrote it?

silly me i thought we could be

thought you were my prince guess i was tricked

you'll never know the feeling i had

for you just went and made me sad

all those tears i cried, were just for a world of hurt and lies

the way you held me i felt so safe

another guy will never fill that space

you still give me the butterflies that were once so strong

going on without you seems so wrong

you made me so happy but now i feel crappy and

i never stop loving until the end

just hope one day you'll be mine again

i can't explain my feelings for you

but i can say i dream about you

then i wake up and see it's not real

you don't know how that makes me feel

you knew i'd never leave so you insisted to tease

you made me think you felt the same i don't doubt you did but what happened to change

i miss you now more than ever

some might say im stuck on you but

they don't know that i truly love you.

you can move on but for me its to hard ill always be here no matter what happens, and now that the time has came and past

my feelings for you will forever last..

Update:

no need for bashing hahaha wow its not a poem poem i don't care if the vocabulary is good or not i jst wrote it off the top of my head

Update 2:

but please be honest if you don't like it you can just say no

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Ignore the haters dear. I think that it is sweet and heartfelt. Don't allow anyone's opinion dictate your creativity. Never stop writing ! =)

  • 1 decade ago

    it is a wonderful poem and i made a few changes in it.. i would like it if you would consider my changes, and if i deserve it give me 10 points. On your behalf though, that was wonderful, i jsut made a couple changes that sound quite nice=]

    silly me i thought we could be

    thought you were my prince guess i was just tricked

    you'll never know the feelings i had

    for you just went and made me so sad

    all those tears i cried, were just for a world full of hurt and lies

    the way you held me i felt so safe

    no one could ever fill that space

    My feelings for you, were once so strong

    going on without you seems so wrong

    you made me so happy but now i feel crappy and

    i never stop loving until the end

    just hope one day you'll be mine again

    Don't know how to explain, how i felt about you

    but i must say i still dream about you

    then when i wake up and see it's not real

    you don't know how that makes me feel

    Me leave? I wouldn't try, but you did and made me cry

    you made me think you felt the same, i think you did but then SHE came

    some might say im stuck on you but

    they will ever know how much i truely do love you

    i see you've moved on but as for me, it is too hard .

    although you've played me just like another card.

    and now that the time has came and past

    my feelings for you will forever last

    Source(s): my beautiful brain
  • 1 decade ago

    It's excellent but I would rewrite it and make sure each last word in a verse rhymes in a pattern.

  • 1 decade ago

    Aw hellz naw! But if ya got yoself a puh-donk-a-donk, we might be in business after all, ya dig?

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    No, the vocabulary is poor. Also, its poem not peom.

  • i like it... it's really good for something off the top of your head... i've been trying to write some poetry but idk it's not that good...lol but you're is great :)

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