WYW asked in 教育與參考考試 · 1 decade ago

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In the high school students will have an inexplicable sense of longing love. And who under the heavy schoolwork pressure will yearn for contacting with love. Especially when students at the age of treason, under the teachers and parents’ opposition want to try more, and have the possibility for the first affection to abandon reason, including the future.

In the study process, any second is very valuable. Students falling in love usually spend all their times on their boyfriend or girlfriend, wasting a lot of study time, also affected the study achievement.

Students in order to accompany their lover sacrifice time, tasks, and even the future. This behavior of short-sightedness is extremely undesirable. Now short-term fall in love in high school, does not mean that the future will have a good ending final. Who can assure when they entered the different universities still can maintain their affection. Why insist on a period of high school students have a tiny chance of good results, to give up their own future?

In immature age, not need to try that not suitable for their age thing. When they have children accidentally how to continue to study? Will be forced to give up school to work to support their families, but only teenage students how to get a good work? When the pure the feeling of student turned into family burden gradually, it will create only a broken home.

Because of no continuing education experience, thought is not mature enough, this feeling will be split easily disturbed. What age do the right thing at this time, the future will not regret it.

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請幫忙修改一下

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或許問題會很多

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Update:

中文

在高中時期的學生,都會對戀愛有莫名的憧憬。在繁重的課業壓力下,都會嚮往接觸愛情的滋味。尤其處於叛逆期的年紀的學生,在老師、家長的反對下越是想嘗試,而很有可能未了初次嘗試的戀情而拋棄所以理智,包括未來。

在升學過程裡,一分一秒都非常寶貴,而談戀愛的學生通常把大部分的時間投注在男女朋友的交往上。浪費了許多讀書時間,也影響了課業成績。

Update 2:

學生為了陪伴在男女朋友身邊玩樂,而犧牲了自己的時間、課業,甚至未來。這種眼光短淺的行為是非常不可取的。而現在短暫的高中時代在一起,不代表未來就會一直走到最後。多少年少戀情一旦分開了天天相見的高中,進入不同的大學就讀便再也沒有交集。高中生又何必堅持一段有大機率無結果的愛戀,還放棄自己的未來?

在不成熟、青澀的年紀,不需要急迫想嘗試不符合年紀該做的行為。假使一不小心有了孩子,如何繼續唸書、升學?只能被迫放棄課業去工作養家,但只有十幾歲的學生會有什麼好工作呢?漸漸沒有了學生清純的感情,有了家累負擔,最後只又造就了一個破碎的家庭。

Update 3:

因為沒有持續升學歷練,不夠成熟思想周全,這段感情也就不安易裂。在什麼年紀就做好此時該做的事,未來才不至於後悔莫及。

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  • 寶寶
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago
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    In high school, students always tend to have an inexplainable feeling of desiring for love. As well, students who are undergoing the heavy peer pressure would generally be yearned for having a relationship.

    Especially when students are in the period of puberty, being against by both parents and teachers, curiosities of being loved can easily take over the rationalities, and thereby leave the future behind.

    For students, however, spending time on a relationship could be considered as a completely waste of time, for they would not have enough time to study, and therefore ruin the grades.

    To maintain a relationship, spending all the quality time with others would be undoubtedly necessarily. And yet to sacrifice some of the studying time could sometimes be needed. This, however, would definitely cause several serious consequences like falling the courses or even falling the entire future career.

    Ironically, such a relationship in high school is the least likely scenario to have a so-called “happy ending.” Most of the “high school sweethearts” are tended to break up after they graduate. To give up the entire future for such a meaningless relationship could be the most ridiculous a high school student can ever make.

    Most importantly, cases of students dropping-out school for pregnancy can easily be found in the western countries like America and Canada. After all, to keep studying with a baby could never be an easy task. In order to be able to raise the baby, students would have to get a job instead of keep going to school.

    And yet, how could a high-school-drop-out student ever find a decent job to raise the entire family? Unfortunately, according to the research, such a family can easily collapse because of the low educations as well as the immature minds.

    To do the right thing at the right ago is fairly important. Therefore, please do not do something that would regret you for the rest of your life!

    2009-06-27 11:51:46 補充:

    因為你寫的那篇錯誤還蠻多的

    所以我針對你中文的部分寫了篇範文

    希望對你有幫助

    Source(s): 以上範文皆為親手寫製 凡有偷襲必定檢舉
  • 1 decade ago

    不好意思喔點數太少了~哈哈

    Source(s): ME
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