Need help with TS, CD, CM, CM, CS format paragraph.?

I'm writing an essay on the Holocaust. My thesis is: Gerda was able to survive the injustices she experienced through her unfaltering qualities of obedience, willpower, and imagination. All my paragraphs are good except this one...

TS: Gerda was obedient to authority.

CD: When her father told her to wear her ski boots on a summer day, Gerda obeyed, even though the request seemed impractical at the time.

CM: This is important because during the freezing winter, Gerda had her ski boots to protect her feet and help her endure the elements.

CM: Her obedience to authority ................

CS: By being obedient, Gerda was able to assure that she .....

I'm having trouble with repetitiveness in the last two sentences.

I know the background info is lacking, but our teacher told us to concentrate on the format and qualities more than the background info.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    CM: Her obedience to authority ................

    "signified her trust in her father and belief that his advice was given with her best interests in mind."

    CS: By being obedient, Gerda was able to assure that she .....

    "would be best prepared as possible to withstand and survive the challenges she would face during the Holocaust."

    On a different note, I just felt like sharing my dissatisfaction with the 11-sentence paragraph format. In middle school, I had to learn and use the 11-sentence paragraph format. In high school, they actively made me un-learn the 11-sentence paragraph format and substitute it with the 5-paragraph essay format. Apparently, the 11-sentence paragraph is counterproductive to the 5-paragraph essay format. In college, professors don't really care much for the 5-paragraph essay as it is often too restrictive and limited in its scope. A student utilizing the 5-paragraph essay may discover that they cannot fully address an essay prompt in just 5 paragraphs alone. Impracticality results from college-level essay prompts being multi-faceted and complex, along with an all-too-often request that papers either be short 3-page essays (to demonstrate that a student can be brief, concise, and to-the-point) or 8-10 page research papers (to examine comprehensiveness of work). The 5-paragraph essay usually translates to 4 and a half pages, which satisfies neither page limit requirements. These writing antics they teach us are silly, but I suppose you can't really write a research paper until you know how to structure an argument (hence learning the 5-paragraph essay), and you cant quite go about writing multi-paragraph essays until you know how to assemble an effective paragraph (thus the 11-sentence TS-CD-CM-CM-chunk-chunk-CS form).

    I suppose what I'm saying is, good luck to you. Teachers will make you learn the 11-sentence then un-learn (in an active process usually synonymous to teachers explicitly saying they don't want to see the 11-sentence format) the 11-sentence. Following which you will learn the 5-paragraph essay format only to discover that it is not useful in college and must adapt to a new style of writing.

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  • paille
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    3 years ago

    11 Sentence Paragraph Format

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  • 4 years ago

    wonderful book. very easy reading. very short read. hint #1 "objectivism" hint #2 it's all about expressions of individualism which have been suppressed to the extent where even the word " I " is banished from the language.....and one man "equality 7-2521" fight to regain it. good luck

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