She broke my heart. How does this sound?

I jsut needed to write down how I felt. I usually write poems. Really good poems actually (not to brag :). For some reason I really wanted to write a song. This is the first song I have ever written so i'm not sure how good it is? Lol I don't write music but I tried here I guess. Could you please let... show more I jsut needed to write down how I felt. I usually write poems. Really good poems actually (not to brag :). For some reason I really wanted to write a song. This is the first song I have ever written so i'm not sure how good it is? Lol I don't write music but I tried here I guess. Could you please let me know how it looks and sounds I suppose? PLEASE AND THANK YOU.

The conductor

Verse:
(guitar)
This is a story, story about a man
About this man and where his story bega-an
About...
???
(guitar and bring in drums)
She walked on in, right into my li-ife
She walked on in and made everything ri-ight
Made me feel like nothing could go wrong
And than one day...my girl was gone

This is the story, yea..when I fell in love

Chorus: (faster but with a rhythm)
Girl I’m a Trainwreck
I’m way off track
I’m stuck at the station but you’re not coming back
I keep waaaiting
I’m dying for you
Whats next girl, whats a dead man to do?


Verse:
(guitar)
So there I was, almost eighteen
And there she was, the girl from my dreams
And there we were, the sparks went fly-ing
You made me happy, without even try-ing
(guitar and bring in drums)
You told all your friends that you were in love with him
We jumped in the deep end before we learned how to swi-im
I loved every second, I loved it all
I wish we had tripped before I learned how to fa-a-all

This is a story, yea..when I fell in love

Chorus: (faster but with a rhthym)
Girl I’m a Trainwreck
I’m way off track
I’m stuck at the station but you’re not coming back
I keep waaaiting
I’m dying for you
Whats next girl, whats a dead man to do?


Verse:
(guitar)
I rushed up to see her but instead she broke my heart
She said things have changed, put me back at the start
And Girl I broooke down, I could tell from her eyes
Girl I broooke down, wanted to bleed out and die
(guitar and bring in drums)
I could tell tell tell that there was another guy
I could tell from your face, that face you make when you lie
I went home, I cried, and I cursed your name
But nothing I did could take away the PA-AY-AIN

This is a story, yea..when I fell in love

Chorus:
Girl I’m a Trainwreck
I’m way off track
I’m stuck at the station but you’re not coming back
I keep waaaiting
I’m dying for you
Whats next girl, whats a dead man to do?

Verse:
Where is my heart, that I might be needing
I can’t feel it, you have it, girl is it beating?
(guitar gets faster)
Bridge: (much faster)
I took my heart back and the train is pu-pu-pulling away
If you aren’t coming back than I’m not gonna to stay
O yea its myyyy time
Its time to move on
Girl Its myyyy time
Now I am gone

Chorus: (FAST)
Girl, I WAS a trainwreck
But now I’m back on track
Other girls will love me if you don’t love me back
I’m done waaaiting
Done dying for you
Now I’m living
I’m not living for you-oo-oooo

This is a story, yea..when I fell FROM love
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