Renny L asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

急!英文法訂正10點!!!!!!

T2.The Hoovers family has five members and plus the uncle. Each family member has their problem. Grandpa Edwin is like eighteen years old, the language he is using is just inappropriate. The institute of elders has sent him away because of His misbehavior. The son Dwayne, is taking a vow of silence as a follower as Nietzsche. Dwayne wants to be a jet pilot. He really thinks by choosing not to talk will really help him to get success. The dad Richard is selling his “method to success” but end up with an unsuccessful result. Mom, Sheryl, she is always having too much pressure and always smokes to relive her pressure. The Uncle Frank is a homosexual and expert on Proust. Frank has failed to recognize as number one in the field and his boyfriend has broken up with him. He has lost the recognition and boyfriend to the same person. He even failed to attend suicide. Frank becomes a huge loser in the story. The most important character of the movie is the Daughter Olive. She is very friendly, kind and lovely. Her dream is to win the little miss sunshine beauty contest. Olive has a huge glasses and this big belly but she is very confident and not afraid of others. When Olive got a notification to attend Little Miss Sunshine beauty contest, everyone is gathered and coming together to California to attend the contest. Things have started to change as they are encounter problems on their way to California.

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7. Therefore, he can’t freely go anywhere nor do anything base on his freewill.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Isn't it "Miss little sunshine"?

    Oh my god, I can't do anything. This system keeps telling me that my response is too long..

    2009-05-07 15:48:25 補充:

    The HOOVER FAMILY / HOOVERS IS BIG FAMILY WITH SIX FAMILY MEMBERS. AND, each family member has HIS OR HER OWN problem. Grandpa Edwin ACTS AS IF HE IS AN eighteen year-old BOYAND the language he is using is just inappropriate (TO WHAT?).

    2009-05-07 15:49:27 補充:

    The institute ( ASSOCIATION?) of THE ELDERLY has sent him away because of His misbehavior (ARE YOU SURE HE IS MISBEHAVING?). The son Dwayne IS VOWING FOR BEING SILENT as a follower OF THE Nietzsche.

    2009-05-07 15:50:22 補充:

    Sheryl, THE MOM HAS ALWAYS HAD too much pressure and HAS SMOKED to relive (YOU MEAN RELIEVE?) her pressure (BE CAREFUL WITH PARALLEL STRUCTURE) . UNCLE FRANK is homosexual and expert on Proust.

    2009-05-07 15:50:40 補充:

    Frank HAD failed to BE ACKNOWLEDGED as number one in THIS field and his boyfriend HAD broken up with him. He HAD lost the recognition (YOU MEAN ACKNOWLEDGMENT?) and boyfriend to the same person.

    2009-05-07 15:50:57 補充:

    He even failed to attend suicide (BE CAREFUL WITH VERB TENSE) Frank becomes a huge loser in the story. The most important character of (IN IS MORE COMMON) the movie is the Daughter Olive, WHO IS very friendly, kind and lovely.

    2009-05-07 15:51:09 補充:

    Her dream is to win the little miss sunshine beauty contest. Olive has a huge glasses and A big belly but she is very confident and UNAFRAID of (UNCLEAR SENTENCE, UNAFRAID OF WHAT?) others.

    2009-05-07 15:51:23 補充:

    When Olive got a notification to attend Little Miss Sunshine beauty contest, everyone is AGAIN GATHERING and coming to California to attend the contest . Things have started to change as they encounter problems on their way to California.

    2009-05-07 15:51:33 補充:

    COMMENTS:

    -MANY GRAMMATICAL ERRORS.

    - WORDING IS NOT PRECISE.

    -TRANSITIONAL PHRASES ARE NEEDED. THIS PARAGRAPH IS VERY CHOPPY.

    -CONFUSED OR UNCLEAR SENTENCES.

    -VERB TENSES ARE TOTALLY MIXED UP.

    - REVIEW ON SUBJECT-VERB AGREEMENT.

    2009-05-07 15:52:53 補充:

    修改在意见那一栏.

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  • 槑仙
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago

    你好! (統一用現在式簡單敘述故事-不然很難寫 呵呵~)

    T2.The Hoovers family has six members including an uncle.

    Each member has his own problem.

    Grandpa Edwin is like an eighteen- year-old guy, his speaking is not inappropriate at all.

    The institute of elders send him back because of his misbehavior.

    The son Dwayne, his behavior is like the follower of Nietzsche.

    Dwayne wants to be a jet pilot, he really believes in silent way will help him to get success.

    Dad Richard wants to sell his "method to success" but it goes to an unsuccessful result.

    Mom, Sheryl, she always has too much pressure and try to relax herself by smoking.

    Uncle Frank is a homosexual and also an expert in Proust.

    But he fails to recognize as top one in the field, and his boyfriend breaks up with him.

    He loses his recognition and boyfriend to the same person. (不太懂)

    He even fails to attend suicide(不懂這句話). Frank is a big loser in this story.

    The major role of this movie is the Daughter Olive.

    She is very friendly, kind and lovely.

    Winning the little miss sunshine beauty contest is her dream.

    Olive is the girl with huge glasses and big belly,

    but she is very confident and never afraid of others.

    When Olive get a notification to attend the contest,

    everybody gathers and joins together to attend the contest.

    Things start to change as they conquer problems on their way to California.

    7. Therefore, he can't go anywhere or do anything by his will freely.

    ~會再來檢查=沒被移除的話(最近知識+怪怪的)~

    Source(s): 自己傷腦筋~
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