What do you think of this poem?
Ages wrinkle Earth’s face many times over
During all of which, clouts of passion fished for souls to bind
No pair fit together like a puzzle piece, but more like matching colors
Some simply do not go together while others are complimentary
Time has waived by most pairs, but there is one it cannot ignore
A moon’s glance provides luminosity
They meet over Earth’s brow
In ardor comes the white rose bud
Fate’s glance will not let them be overlooked
Might is pure in each gaze toward each other
In a dash, he is gone. She follows
They will follow one another to the end of time
Neither will tire, for their own passion empowers them
Never ending, never dying, never fading
If it is a strong as its weakest point, then their love will never be broken
They use it to feed the horrors; to turn them to bliss
To this day they lend it to souls
To this day, however, it becomes a challenge
Acceptance of gratitude and peace is uncommon
War rages, conflicts emerge
The couple cries; weather destroys
What has become to make mankind so cruel?
Alas strength's testing passes
As it survives in a new Era
Love mends, love heals, love cares,
Love kills, love destroys, love is moody
incase some people don't understand the white rose part
a white rose symbolizes undying love, purity, and loyalty
I write often and I'm writing a book.
btw... How old do I sound?
I just came up with a title! It's called...
- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
Wow. Your really good! I really, really, like it. I honestly can't think of anything to change.
Keep writing. You have a talent for it.
- bnyxisLv 41 decade ago
Moon chasing Sun,
Sun Loving the Earth
Rose loving the Sun
Love above all things is eternal
only as long as mankind is around
Once humanity dies out love will die
- That Inuit DudeLv 41 decade ago
You show good potential.
Good at creating mental imagery.
Maybe switch the last two lines around.
Keep writing and you will develop your talent to something you didn't you were capable of. Good words, very creative. Best of luck in your endeavors.
- 1 decade ago
Very good and insightful. You should simplify it a little however, very good.
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- 1 decade ago
very good! :] i like the symbolism
and you sound like an adult to me
- Anonymous1 decade ago
i lke it,
sometimes confusing and hard to follow, but still great! :-D