跑跑 asked in 教育與參考考試 · 1 decade ago

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One evening,a man named Jack invited by a friend of him to a wedding.On the wedding,everyone was happy,they enjoyed delicacy and good wine,so did Jack.

The wedding celebrated to mitnight,but there was a terrible thing happened that Jack

was drunk.Jack who was drunk seriously,went down to the street alone.He wanted to

take a taxi home,he knew that if he drove his own car home,he would be punished by

polices.He started to wave his hand to solicit taxis,but none of taxi came.

Jack became irrational and waved seriously.There was a car came finally,but it didn't

look like a taxi at all.

On the next day,when Jack was conscious,he found that he was in the police office.

Jack was surprising,"I didn't drive by myself, but why am I here?"he though.Then a

police came with anger and said"Sir,Why were you drunk seriously?Were it not for

my colleague,you wuold sleep on the street last night!"As the police told Jack,he

realized that he didn't solicit taxis,he solicited a police van!

Though the police was angry, he didn't punish Jack.He sent him to home and told him

not to do it again.

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  • 寶寶
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    1 decade ago
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    One evening,a man named Jack invited by a friend of him to a wedding.

    One evening, a man named Jack was invited by a friend to a wedding.

    On the wedding,everyone was happy,they enjoyed delicacy and good wine,so did Jack.

    On the wedding, everyone enjoyed the delicacy and the good wine, so did jack

    The wedding celebrated to midnight, but there was a terrible thing happened that Jack

    was drunk.

    The wedding did not end until the midnight; unfortunately, there is a terrible thing happened to Jack.

    Jack who was drunk seriously,went down to the street alone. He wanted to ...

    Jack knew that he, now, is so drunk that it would be almost impossible for him to drive.

    He, therefore, went to the street and tried to call himself a taxi.

    He started to wave his hand to solicit taxis,but none of taxi came.

    However, hard as he tried, none of the taxi came.

    Jack became irrational and waved seriously. There was a car came finally...

    Jack, then, lost his patient; he started waving harder and harder. A car, eventually, came and picked him up, and yet the car did not look like a taxi at all.

    On the next day,when Jack was conscious,he found that he was in the police office.

    On the next day, Jack woke up and found out that he was in the police office.

    Jack was surprising,"I didn't ...

    "How come I am in the jail? I did not drive last night … or did I?"he wondered.

    Then a police came with anger and said...

    A police officer came; "Sir, you were insanely drunk yesterday. If my colleague did not find you last night, you were, now, still sleeping on the street!" he spoke angrily.

    As the police told Jack,he realized that he didn't solicit taxis,he solicited a police van!

    Jack realised that the taxi he jumped into last night was actually a police car!

    Though the police was angry, he didn't punish Jack.

    Although the officer was angry, he did not convict Jack.

    He sent him to home and told him not to do it again.

    He sent Jack home and told him never to do this again.

    2009-04-21 07:25:43 補充:

    因為字數超過

    所以我有剪掉一些你寫的部分

    2009-04-21 07:26:29 補充:

    我大概只是照著你原本的意思做修正而已

    有疑問請提出

    Source(s): 以上範文皆為親手寫製 凡有偷襲必定檢舉
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