Please read the intro to my novel and tell me what you think?

I have put the link to the intro of my novel below and would appreciate if you would read it and let me know what you think of it. It's long, but I believe it is worth it. I'd like to know if it is detailed well, or if it doesn't have enough. I appreciate your time.... show more I have put the link to the intro of my novel below and would appreciate if you would read it and let me know what you think of it. It's long, but I believe it is worth it. I'd like to know if it is detailed well, or if it doesn't have enough. I appreciate your time.

http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/chapte...
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