Read my poems -Which is better?
Which one do you like better?First or second thanks.
I live in agony and in fear of what i have become
Who am i?What has happened?
All i feel is soreness and pain within my flesh
Everyday I walk around in my life with emptiness in my heart
A big Vacant hole
The hole is filled in with sadness and misery
A weight is buried down on me
I`ve lost the inner me and who i am
The grief i face on daily basics
One human shouldn't deal with this
Tears are hold back and a constant head pain thumps
Frustration lays in me and no hope
I am still alive physically but dead spiritually
How can i have faith if everything keeps crashing
The type of pain within me is like a wound to my heart
A blood flow falling from my arms
My eyes puffing frequently
A quick memory plays back fast
I have nothing left.
Damn,just thinking of you makes my body shiver
The pain and Frustration you caused-had my mind lost thinking i was in love.
But,All you did was tore me apart, I kept running back to your devious love
All the nights i stayed up crying waking up the next day with my head burning
I could`ve died for you,Man love is blind
All you did was abuse me emotionally
Triggered and juggled my affection for you
It took me a while to get over what i had for you
Even though,you didn't have the same back for me
I forgive you for the times you had me away from reality
When ever i see you, Flash backs to the day i thought i fell in love with you plays back.
Plays back like a fast forward movie
The stupid things i did just for you
How can i love someone more than my self
The destruction you caused in my heart just devotion towards you
Man,never again must i be caught in a trap
I hate you But, I love you more for the lesson you taught me
Never give my all ever again
- Favorite Answer
Dude, that's hardcore.
The first one is a swirl of depression and selfishness, focusing on inner emotions. I wonder what has happened to this person to make them feel this way.
I like the second one better because it's more specific, taking me back to an actual event. I can really relate to that second one, actually. The lines are disfigured and imperfect in length, yet that's the beauty of the poem because it mirrors your mixed-up feelings for this person.
The first one.
- Anonymous1 decade ago
Wish i could write like that (:
Im In love with both,So im gonna Bend the Rules and say,
Keep On writting Poetry,You Have The Talent. <3
- Anonymous1 decade ago
Wow, I prefer Trapped. Its very nice
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- 1 decade ago
I like both, nice job