我的題目是: When you were a child ,what did you want to be when you grew up ? how did your goal changes as you grew up ?why ?
When we were child , our dreams were changeable,because our dreams were affected by the environment we live in and the people around us. As we grew-up , we often found the dream we had
as a child silly or unpractical ,so we may change our dream again . (When I was a child , I want to be a flight attendant ; but it changed to a coffee shop keeper.)-thesis.
When I was a child , I want to be a flight attendant . Because ,When I was a child , my mother took me travel a lot . And during the travel , I was really impressed by the kindness and excellent service of flight attendant , they were always very gentile to me , always asking me if I need a juice or snack. In addition, I also found their uniform sharp and pretty .So , I want to become one of them . But as I grew older , I found out it’s not easy to become a flight attendant. To be a flight attendant , you need to be good-looking ,in good shape, and communicates well .You also have to go through a rigorous training before you canbecome a flight attendant . I know I will never have the skill to become a flight attendant , so I gave up this goal.
Later on , I want to opened a coffee shop of my own . I enjoy spending time in a café and I enjoy drinking coffee . Most important of all, I want to design my own coffee shop . I want to plan how the
Coffee shop looks and how everything is set up inside the coffee shop.
But I change this goal again . Because my mother burst my bubble by saying it’s risky and requires a lot of money to open a coffee shop . She said many coffee shops go out of business in a short time .
She insisted me to stop daydreaming and actually thinking about doing something serious ,such as become a nurse.She said it’s more important to get a stable job than doing something else . She said you
want to be able to support yourself in the future than dying out of hunger .
I agreed with her that getting a stable job is important . Sometime you have to make a choice between following your dream or getting a stable job . When you grew up , you want to be able to support yourself , so getting a stable job is the only way to achieve this . So, now I’m still exploring.
- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
第一句就錯了 When we were CHILDREN, 要放複數 你卻放單數的 CHILD...後面 直接接BECAUSE不用放逗號在前面 而且直接接不通順
we often found the dream we had as a child silly or unpractical
你要在 as a child 後面放 is
When I was a child , I wantED to be a flight attendant
前面用 WAS 所以後面的want 要加ED 變成過去式
Later on , I want to opened
to 的後面 要加動詞原型 所以是把過去式放在 want
I wanted to open
She said many coffee shops go out of business in a short time .
She said 的後面 要加 that
Sometime you have to make a choice between following your dream or getting a stable job .
把getting a stable job 改成 facing the reality 會比較好
- 1 decade ago
totally agree eh...
- RenRenLv 71 decade ago