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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

What do you want them to want?

Getting it across, you unhand

the broken brick words into their faces

and they want passionate reasons

to like the way you present the mass of crap

you've created

but you give them only vague bitterness

and a bit of poetry when you can afford

to drain your insides

without caving your own head in.

Dripping with ambiguous expression

and dark shades over your face

you hide

behind the smallest blade of grass in the garden

and they think that the blade is a flower

and you sharpen the green knife

ambushing their wishes,

your pale and swollen

charade,

you will never

sail the skyline on a pretty cloud,

you have not earned your wounds

you have not slept with dogs in summer

and they sense your red breath of desperation,

your dire mess,

they wait at the edge of the sun for you

to burn with them

but you only whisper,

you can only barely

whisper.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
    Best Answer

    The use of the simile of a "green dagger" is so unwittingly sinister, it appealed to my evil side ... the menace of this poem was brilliant

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    "but you give them only vague bitterness

    and a bit of poetry when you can afford

    to drain your insides

    without caving your own head in."

    This makes a statement I've been wanting to SCREAM for a while now.

    EDIT: And I think of writers block as the brain and soul's inability to drain. When I feel too much I can't let it go. So I think I need to take a break from writing. Heh.

  • Daisy
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    A whisper to some is an unbidden scream trying to find voice in another

  • nice..

    my whispers ragged

    on the last breath I gagged

    and my tiny sinister tail I wagged

    then water to my lips you brought

    gave me pause to wonder..*thought*

    and loudly now I say well done

    to the tale you've aptly spun

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  • -
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    I heard Bukowski in this.

    I hear frustration and weariness of living up to other's expectations.

    I hear pain and a desire to just be.

    I hear the sad song of a poet.

    ma

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Every line, every word but especially...

    "Dripping with ambiguous expression

    and dark shades over your face

    you hide "

    I have, however, earned my wounds (in life).

    This is one of my favorites. *Applauds*

  • 1 decade ago

    For some reason these words remind me of people that want the right answers to their problems but won't listen to reason.

  • jenny
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    This is great, the struggle of being true to self, in spite of others.

    Really a great write, Bravo

  • Cami
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    I love the way Alobar and ma said it. Would be great to hear you read this one... I'm just sayin'.

  • Alobar
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    These lines nailed it, the fragility of great egos, of simple humanity:

    but you only whisper,

    you can only barely

    whisper.

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