Crystal asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

急!!請幫我修改英文文法!!20點

這篇是同學之前討論寫出來的

但是文法方面大家都沒把握

請文法好的人幫忙修改一下

感激不盡

主題是自創的節日--巧克力節

Have you ever heard of Chocolate Day?

It's a family to making chocolate together holiday that many people celebrate in June second Sunday.

According to our group member, this is how we celebrate it.

Everything starts at this Sunday in the morning.

the first thing that people do is looking for cocoa bean last year.

Then it's time to making chocolate,

and hide a paper that writing you would speak from chocolate like thinks word .

The most popular food on this holiday is chocolate making food.

And every drinks hot cocoa.

If you're invited to someone's house for a meal,

it's customary to take a chocolate be made by yourself gift,

such as a chocolate cookies or chocolate cake or box is made by cocoa bean.

After eating, it's time to change chocolate,

that have a small card in the inside.

This is usually done with groups of about family.

Every says thanks for tend to each other.

Then, the last tradition of the day is to save cocoa bean for next year.

Everyone does it. What a wonderful holiday for family.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Have you ever heard of a special holiday called the Chocolate Day?

    It's on the Sunday, June Second. This is when a family gathers together to make chocolates.

    According to our group members, everything starts on the Sunday morning.

    The first thing that people do is to look for cocoa beans from last year.

    Then it's time to make chocolate.

    While you are making the chocolate, write a piece of paper that stated your wish and put it into the chocolate that you've made.

    The most popular food on this day is chocolate and for the drinks are drinks that are associated with cocoa.

    If you're invited to someone's house to have a meal, it's traditional that you bring deserts that you made it yourself.

    The deserts can be chocolate cookies, chocolate cakes or even a box made out of cocoa beans.

    After the meal, it's time to exchange chocolates, that have consist of a small card inside.

    This is usually done with large number of family members.

    Everyone appreciates one and another.

    Then, the last tradition for the holiday is to save cocoa beans for next year.

    It is such a wonderful holiday for families.

    2009-03-17 21:06:19 補充:

    i cant understand everything that you are trying to say so if i changed any of your idea then im sorry!

  • 1 decade ago

    Have you ever heard of "the" Chocolate Day? (特定節日要加the)

    Every familiy makes chocolate products (做巧克力的東西)together to celebrate this holiday in the second Sunday of June.

    According to our group member, this is how we celebrate it. (這一句我不知妳是想要做什麼,但我覺得不需要講,可刪)

    Everything starts on this Sunday morning.

    People have started looking for cocoa beans (要複數)last year. People put a piece of paper inside the chocolate to express their appreciation when they make the chocolate products.

    (我不懂你要放在裡面的話是什麼,所以直接幫你簡化)

    The most popular food "for" this holiday are ”chocolate food” (我不懂為什麼已經是慶祝巧克力的節你們還要說最受歡迎的是巧克力的食物?)and "hot chocolate"(熱可可是hot chocolate).

    If you're invited to someone's house for a meal,

    it's customary to "bring your handmade chocolate food",

    such as a chocolate cookies, a chocolate cake, or a box made by cocoa beans(複數,還有這邊是在說用可可豆做的盒子嗎?).

    After eating, it's time to exchange chocolate products (逗點要去掉) that have a small piece of paper inside.

    This is usually done with family.

    Everyone says thanks to each other.

    Then, the last tradition of this day is to save cocoa beans for next year.

    Everyone does it. What a wonderful holiday for family.

    2009-03-21 01:41:29 補充:

    我會把倒數第二句改成 It usually celebreates with family.

    2009-03-21 01:41:52 補充:

    倒數第4句, sorry

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  • 1 decade ago

    因為我不確定你要的是什麼,所以我在每個句子之後打上中文意思。

    Have you ever heard of Chocolate Day?

    ◎ OK 沒問題

    It's a family to making chocolate together holiday that many people celebrate in June second Sunday.

    ◎It's a day that family members gather and make chocolate, and the day is on the second Suday of June. 在六月的第二個禮拜日,每個家庭都會聚集在一起,然後一起做巧克力。

    According to our group member, this is how we celebrate it.

    Everything starts at this Sunday in the morning.

    ◎According to our group members, this is how we celebrate it. Everything starts in the morning of this Sunday. 依據我們的成員,這個就是我們慶祝的方法。在這個星期六的早晨,每樣東西都開始進行了。

    the first thing that people do is looking for cocoa bean last year.

    Then it's time to making chocolate,

    and hide a paper that writing you would speak from chocolate like thinks word .

    ◎The first thing that people do is looking for cocoa beans from last year. 人們做的第一件事就是去找上一年的可可豆。

    The most popular food on this holiday is chocolate making food.

    And every drinks hot cocoa.

    ◎The most popular food on this holiday is food that is made from Chocolate; and everybody drinks hot cocoa. 在這個節日,最流行的食物就是任何有關巧克力的食物。大家也都喝熱可可亞。

    If you're invited to someone's house for a meal,

    it's customary to take a chocolate be made by yourself gift,

    such as a chocolate cookies or chocolate cake or box is made by cocoa bean.

    ◎If you are invited to somebody's house for a meal, it's customary to bring a chocolate, which must be made by yourself. 如果你有被邀請到別人家作客,習俗上,你要帶一個你自己做的巧克力。

    After eating, it's time to change chocolate,

    that have a small card in the inside.

    ◎After the meal, it's time to exchange chocolates, and there is a small card inside the chocolate. 吃完飯後,就是交換巧克力的時間了,每個巧克力裡面都有一張小卡片。

    This is usually done with groups of about family.

    Every says thanks for tend to each other.

    ◎This is usually done with relatives. Everybody says thanks each other. 這個通常是跟親戚一起完成的。大家都跟對方道謝。

    Then, the last tradition of the day is to save cocoa bean for next year.

    Everyone does it. What a wonderful holiday for family.

    ◎這句沒錯~可是如果可以的話希望你用驚嘆號當結尾,不然感覺很......無言。

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