請教英文文法 可以這樣寫嗎

我想寫一段話

大意大概是

instead of waiting for several hours, people now can purchase things on line or hold a video conference with the business partners, which accelerates the progress of the assignment and allows people to do more things in limited time.

which 可以這樣用嗎

我一直習慣這樣用

可是不知道對不對

因為word剛剛出現了文法錯誤的符號

綠色的線從partners一直畫到accelerates

可是我的which 不是形容partner

而是形容整件人類可以更方便的這件事

這樣寫對嗎

Update:

這麼多人回答

真是非常感謝

Update 2:

我只是在練托福作文

內容有關科技的進步而已

所以沒有什麼太特殊的意義啦

非常謝謝

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Instead of waiting for several hours, people now can purchase things online or hold a video conference with the business partners, which accelerates the progress of the assignment commercial activities and allows people to do more things in limited time.

    1) 第一列的for是多餘的字, 有了for好像several hours是等待的對象.

    2) people不是特定的人, 那partners更不是了, 不需the.

    3) which這樣用是沒問題的, 逗號不可省略.

    這種用法, which不可換成that, 任何一個關代that不可緊接出現在逗號之後.

    4) 不明白這裡用the assignment是啥意思, 故改成語意較順的commercial activities.

    2009-03-06 15:27:00 補充:

    刪字線沒顯示出來, 修正後全文為:

    Instead of waiting several hours, people now can purchase things online or hold a video conference with business partners, which accelerates the progress of commercial activities and allows people to do more things in limited time.

    2009-03-06 17:17:40 補充:

    版主, 如果您能說明the assignment在網上購物與視訊會議上您所要表達的意思, 在下會再做符合需求的建議.

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  • 1 decade ago

    which 之後接的形容句子基本上都是輔助語

    例如: His car, which was once owned by his mom, is so old that he can hardly drive in the snow.

    所以改成that可能會比較好, 記得要留住逗點

    而如同上面大大所說, 句子其實可以再縮減, 而"accelerate"的加速的意思多使用再交通工具上, 有點"催下去"的意思

    若是我會縮減成以下

    instead of waiting for several hours, the consumption of time can be decreased by the use of technology, such as online shopping, and video conference.

    若是有錯誤還請各位大大糾正

    謝謝^^

    2009-03-09 16:00:34 補充:

    which 之後接的形容句子基本上都是非必要的輔助語

    例如: His car, which was once owned by his mom, is so old that he can hardly drive in the snow.

    也可說成 His car is so old that he can hardly drive in the snow.

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  • 1 decade ago

    這樣用 which 使得句子太長, 容易造成表達上的不精確, 稍作修改(紅色字) 如下:

    Instead of waiting for several hours, people now can purchase goods on line or hold a video conference with their business partners. This new approach accelerates progress of assignments and allows people to do more work in a limited time.

    approach 方法, 門徑, 接洽方式.

    刪去 progress 和 assignments 前面的定冠詞 the, 因為是泛指一般, 而非某一特定的 progress 和 assignment. progress 不可數名詞,不加 s.

    in a limited time 在有限的時間內

    do + adj + work(片語)工作, 做事情; work在此是不可數名詞,不加 s.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    你好

    word 綠色的線 是不會矯正文法的

    他指矯正拼法 所以沒拼錯 他就不會出現

    還有 如果你打完逗號之後沒空格 他也會連起來

    我是認為你的文法沒錯啦 你也可以把which 換成 that 看看

    個人淺見 希望對你有所幫助

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  • 1 decade ago

    是對的,未發現有錯誤,我這端word 文法檢查並未劃綠線,有時出現錯誤訊息只是文字間空格是否符合規定的問題,並非文字用法有錯。

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