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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

可以幫我check一下一篇essay嗎!! 20P

請各位幫我check一下內容, 文法及用詞!! 感謝

From this article, the writer, Jamieson-Emms, leads us to probe into the aspect of how girls treat other girls and how they want to be popular from a third person’s point of view. It focuses on how they think in their way, do in their way, but why?

Everyone admires and adores things which possess of gorgeous and attractive appearance, no matter what age or gender you are. By the time that our life has been greatly promoted, teenagers of nowadays have the ability to pursue excellent material life, and to be luxuriously fashionable. They define those popular girls “they all party, drink, have sex, skinny and rich” and then try hard to make themselves fit in, they want to be more conspicuous, to be like the girls in movies and on TV. They want to be strutting down the aisle with all the eyes on them, to be the one everybody loves and worships. Therefore, they start partying, start dieting, start having boyfriend and having sex with them. However, they do not know that, they are still young and immature, do not know what makes them popular now, may not help them further after they step into the society. All they are doing at the moment is just to pursue temporary satisfactions but the permanent attainments. There are still spaces prepared for them to grow. Someday, when they turn their head around looking back, they will discover that all they have done is just trivial and worthless.

Update:

Adolescence is probably the most befuddling time that an individual goes through. It is a time when you are no longer a child but have not yet to enter complete adulthood. This age of incomplete maturity can be extremely dangerous.

Update 2:

In my opinion, I think global marketing towards young girls is an added pressure on them to become this perfect representation of themselves, which is not real at all. And then, there comes problems, such as eating disorders, health problems and over all self confidence issues.

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It’s creating a new generation of self obsessed young girls to basically think they are not good enough, tall enough, pretty enough, and skinny enough to live this life, it is not natural to think like this.

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Adolescence should be taught to be happy with who they are and the substance that makes them a good person, not the physical attributes they can bring to the society.

感謝各位!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • 1 decade ago
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    In this article, the writer, Jamieson-Emms, lead us to probe into the realm of how girls treat each others, and how they wish to become popular. This was done from a third person's point of view. It focuses on the question of why they think and behave in the way they do.

    Everyone admires and adores gorgeous and attractive things, no matter what age or gender you are. As our living standard now has improved, teenagers nowadays have the ability to persue excellent material life, and to be luxuriously fashionable. The image of a popular girl is defines as one who is constantly ' partying , drinking , having sex , skinny and rich ', as they try hard to fit in. They wish to stand out, to be like those girls in the movies and on TV. They want to be strutting down the aisle with al the eyes on them, to be the one everybody loves and worships. Therefore, they start partying, start dieting, start having boy friends and indulge in sex with them. However, they are not aware of the fact that they are still young and immature, and do not know what make them popular now may not help them further when they enter society. All they are doing now is persueing temporary satisfactions without permanent attainments. There are still scopes for them to grow. Someday when they turn around and look back, they will realise that all they have done is only trivial and worthless.

    Adolescence is probably the most befuddling time that an individual goes through. It is a time when you are no longer a child but have not yet entered complete adulthood. This age of incomplete maturity can be extremely dangerous.

    In my opinion, global marketing towards young girls is an added pressure on them to become this perfect representation of themselves, which is not real at all. This causes problems such as eating disorders, general health problems and overall self confidence issues.

    Source(s): 英國資深翻譯 自著
  • 1 decade ago

    本文中,作者,賈米森- Emms ,使我們的角度探討如何對待其他女孩女孩,以及它們如何想成為受歡迎的由第三人的觀點。它著重於如何,他們認為在他們的方式,這樣做的方式,但為什麼呢?

    每個人都欽佩和喜歡的東西,擁有美麗的和有吸引力的外觀,無論年齡或性別的你。的時候,我們的生活已經極大地推動,如今青少年有能力追求卓越的物質生活,並成為豪華時尚。他們確定這些流行的女孩“ ,他們所有的黨,飲料,有性別,消瘦和豐富” ,然後努力使自己適應,他們要更加突出,像電影中的女孩,並在電視上。他們希望strutting了過道與所有對他們的眼中,是一個人人都愛和崇拜。因此,他們開始聚會,開始節食,開始了和男友做愛他們。然而,他們不知道,他們還很年輕,不成熟,不知道是什麼讓他們熱門,可能無法幫助他們進一步後步入社會。所有這些工作成績,目前只是暫時的滿足,但追求的永久造詣。還有空格準備增加。有一天,當他們把他們的頭部周圍回頭看,他們會發現,所有他們所做的只是微不足道,毫無價值。

    青少年可能是最befuddling時間,個人經歷。這是一個時候,你不再是一個孩子,但還沒有完全進入成年。這個年齡段不完整的成熟是非常危險的。

    在我看來,我認為全球市場對年輕女孩是一個更大的壓力,成為這個完美的代表性,但它們不是真正的在所有。然後,總會有問題,如飲食失調,健康問題以及所有的自信心問題。

    這是建立一個新的一代年輕女孩的自我迷戀基本認為他們不夠好,身高不夠,很不夠,不夠瘦生活這種生活,這不是自然地認為這樣。

    青少年應該學會很樂意與他們是誰和實質,使他們一個很好的人,而不是他們的物理屬性,可以給社會。

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