幫我修改英文自傳......急

因為我的寫作能力有待加強

修改之處甚多,文章也長

希望也可以增加一些字

並修改錯字、文法

謝謝

後面有些真的寫不出來能請您幫我翻譯謝謝??

AUTOBIOGRAPLY

  Studying in YUDA senior high school.

  I live in Chung-Li. There are five members in my family,including my groundpa, my parents, my elder brother, and me. My fanily life is harmonious and happy. My dear parents are businesspeople, they work in the market. they have a great impact on my personality and they always tell me, "Actions speak louder than words." and "The most important thing is what you really learn in the process of doing something and make sure you havealready made every effort for it." With their suggestion, I apply for this department, in which I strongly interested.

  I love traveling. And I have been to many countries. The most unforgettable trip is the interested trip in Australia. That is my first time to go to abroad. Australia is an island, like Taiwan. There are many kind of animals and friut. That is my first lone to talk to the strong man. "Would you tell me how to go to the zee?" How easy the words is. But I can't tell quinkly and run away. Now I don't bebashful, I can say louder and quinkly.

  My dream is going around the world by myself. There can make many friends, and learn different kind of musical instrument. Learning English songs is good at learning English .在求學的過程中,我相信英文是必要的.英文歌是最快的學習方法。走向全世界並學習其中的奧妙是我最大的樂趣之一,他帶領著我走向國際的舞台。

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  • JACK
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago
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    【以下是個人,將您的文章,直接重寫一遍;不過當然以不失真為主,敬請參考,謝謝!】

    AUTOBIOGRAPHY

    I live in Chung-li and study in Yuda senior high school. There are five members in my family, inclusive of my grandpa, parents, my older brother and myself. I lead a harmonious family life. Both my parents run business in the market. They influence me quite a few. For example, they are used to telling me that actions speak louder than words. Moreover, they teach me that the most important thing lies in making sure what I've really learned from coping with different affairs. And they also tell me it truly counts me responsible if I've made enough efforts in doing everything. So with their advice, I apply for this department in which I'm strongly interested.

    When it comes to my hobbies, I enjoy traveling a lot and I've been to many countries. The most unforgettable trip took place in Australia because it was my first time to go abroad. Australia , something like Taiwan , is larger island, where you would see many kinds of animals and fruits. What's embarrassing was my first talk with a man, “Would you please show me how to get to the zoo?” At that time, I was so shy that I didn't dare to speak out and just ran away; even it seemed so easy to open my mouth. Now I am, however, not too bashful to face such a situation.

    And my biggest dream is to travel all over the world by myself, because I can make plenty of friends. Also, I'd like to learn about different instruments owing to the best way to learn English better, I think, is from touching English songs. English is necessary, I believe, in the progress of learning English, and it will surely lead me into the global village in a short time.

    2009-02-15 22:40:16 補充:

    ◎ 關於結語,我可以提供以下的參考:

    And, last but not the least, I'll try my best to improve my English to a better ground. I know it'll take me more time and energy to fulfill this goal; however, I think it's really worthwhile.

    Source(s): JACK, JACK
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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    你裡面的錯字很多, 代表你這個人很焦慮喔, 可能學英文帶給你焦慮與不安吧

    >> AUTOBIOGRAPHY

      I live in Chung-Li and study in Yuda Senior High School. There are five members in my family which include my grandpa, my parents, my elder brother, and me. My family life is harmonious and happy. My dear parents are businesspeople and they work in the market. They have great impacts on my personality who always tell me, "Actions speak louder than words," and "The most important thing is what you really learn in the process of doing something and you need to make sure you have already made every effort to do it." It’s with their suggestion that I’d apply to your department in which I’m strongly interested.

      I love traveling and I have been to many countries for the past few years. The most unforgettable trip was to Australia , which is my first time to go abroad. Australia is not an island like Taiwan . There were many kinds of animals and fruits. And that was my first time to talk to a stranger in English - "Would you tell me how to go to the zoo?" How easy it was. But I couldn't tell it quickly and so run away. Now I won't be ashamed of it. I can say it louder and quickly now.

      My dream is to travel around the world by myself. I can make many friends and learn different kinds of musical instruments. Learning English songs is a good way to learn English.

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  • pearl
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    專業英文自傳翻譯,相信會對你有幫助!

    http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/jw!w6gPRaOCFQVCeNg8iHiY...

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