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My School

My school is very beautiful. It is in Kaohsiung. Its name is Houjing junior high school. I like my school very much.

There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. class on the playground and we often play sports on it, too. My classroom is on the first floor. It is big and clean. Outside the classroom, there are a lot of trees and colorful flowers .There is also a library on the first floor. There are many books in the library. I sometimes read books here. There are some music rooms and art rooms in my school, too.

The teachers in my school are very kind. My classmates are very friendly. I am happy in my school.

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  • 寶寶
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago
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    My School

    My school is very beautiful.

    It is in Kaohsiung.

    Its name is Houjing junior high school.

    I like my school very much.

    There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. class on the playground and we often play sports on it, too.

    這兩句可以合在一起

    There is a big playground in the middle of my school where we could have Physical Education class or play sports.

    在寫作的時候盡量不要用縮寫

    My classroom is on the first floor. It is big and clean.

    這兩句可以合在一起

    My classroom is on the first floor which is big and clean.

    Outside the classroom, there are a lot of trees and colorful flowers.

    寫作時不要用”a lot of” 那是俚語

    Outside of the classroom, there are so many trees and colourful flowers.

    There is also a library on the first floor. There are many books in the library.

    這兩句可以合在一起

    There is also a library on the first floor, in which have so many books.

    (這句難了點)

    I sometimes read books here.

    There are some music rooms and art rooms in my school, too.

    The teachers in my school are very kind.

    My classmates are very friendly.

    I am happy in my school.

    2009-02-10 14:23:49 補充:

    其實你寫的文章的文法都沒有錯

    幫你稍微改了一點點讓你的文章看起來比較順

    其實英文並不難的

    加油喔!

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  • 1 decade ago

    謝謝你

  • Nancy
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    文法很好。建議您:

    1 把一些句子用連接詞連起來,像是as well as, and, along with, or等等。看起來比較順。

    2 有關聯的句子放在一起。

    3 稍微加強解釋,像是你說的big and clean之類。還有呢?為什麼你喜歡學校?

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