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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

What do you think of this poem I wrote?

To whom it concerns, Darlene's work will be late,

it fell on her pancakes and stuck to her plate...

To whom it concerns, my ma made me write this,

and I'm just her kid, so how could I fight this...

To whom it concerns, I lost my assignment,

maybe I'll get lucky, solitary confinement...

To whom it concerns, Darlene's great with the ball,

but guys don't watch tomboys when they're cruising the hall...

To whom it concerns, I just turned thirteen,

too short to be quarterback, too plain to be queen...

To whom it concerns, I'm not made of steel,

when I get blindsided my pain is quite real...

I don't mean to squawk, but it really burns...

I just thought I'd mention it, to whom it concerns...

-Darlene Conner

I got this copyrighted, so don't even think about it!

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    OMG.... This poem is amazing.... I need to tell you about this contest that you can win $125,000 for first place. It's a poem contest... O....M.....G..... you can SOOO WIN!! =D That poem is really amazing. I truly am telling the truth. Go to. www.MiguelN.com

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  • 1 decade ago

    i think it's good, just have one thought on it, put more spaces in it.

    To whom it concerns, Darlene's work will be late,

    it fell on her pancakes and stuck to her plate...

    To whom it concerns, my ma made me write this,

    and I'm just her kid, so how could I fight this...

    To whom it concerns, I lost my assignment,

    maybe I'll get lucky, solitary confinement...

    To whom it concerns, Darlene's great with the ball,

    but guys don't watch tomboys when they're cruising the hall...

    To whom it concerns, I just turned thirteen,

    too short to be quarterback, too plain to be queen...

    To whom it concerns, I'm not made of steel,

    when I get blindsided my pain is quite real...

    I don't mean to squawk, but it really burns...

    I just thought I'd mention it, to whom it concerns...

    -Darlene Conner

    Source(s): if you space it out more, it gets more feeling sometimes. good luck with more poems
  • I would agree to space it but other than that I think it's excellent

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    its cute

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  • 1 decade ago

    this is pretty good

  • 1 decade ago

    why would you copyright that mess nobody wants it

  • 1 decade ago

    lol

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