Vova34
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Vova34 asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

POETRY TO SONG. What do you think ?

I wrote this poetry and than change something to make it a song but I do not know if its good. Plz help.

Unreachable

Moving slowly toward the unreachable destination

through my path of desired sensation

pools of agony that will last

and those dents in my heart have captured the past

her thoughts are not about me

its been hard for my hope to agree

because wall of reality never breaks

why cant I stop making mistakes

(chorus)

fiery tears fall down and splash

turning the dreams into ash

they get me down on my knees

while I struggle searching for peace

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now seeing she cant be with me

those feelings wont flee

grown from empty space

resisting what is so hard to face

like a corrosive cloud from within

its damaged body that I'm in

leaving wishes that still thrive

and my luck who refused to arrive

(chorus)

fiery tears fall down and splash

turning the dreams into ash

they get me down on my knees

while I struggle searching for peace

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her cute smile has fueled my day

and those words I could not disobey

what can I do, what should I change

how do I reach that Infinite range

why does not love bring presents for me

why cant my feelings run wild and free

the sun of desires wont rise

leaving in shadows my ultimate prize *

(Chorus)

fiery tears fall down and splash

turning the dreams into ash

they get me down on my knees

while I struggle searching for peace

_________________________________

receding in depth is my inner voice

imprisoned for live ,leaves no choice

its a time for hope to lose its sight

and block away the Ifs of light

she is walking away with reflection in her stare

I know that image of me has never been there

now from pointless chase I resign

hoping time can erase the sign.

Copyright ©2008 Volodymyr Rudeychuk

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Aww it's beautiful.

  • 1 decade ago

    awwwwwwwwwwwwwww

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