蚊子 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

已經回覆的英文對照版改正??(請給我多組答案..20點!)

在高中的時候.因為一次因緣際會下,我愛上了咖啡,從那時候開始,我就有個夢想,我想要開一個屬於我自己的咖啡館,我做了很多的努力,去達成這個心願,包括加入咖啡社學習基本的如何泡咖啡以及去咖啡店實習如何賣咖啡等等.

我想從大學畢業後,我應該會先找一份正職的工作來籌募資金,以便我的咖啡館能在我35歲以前正式開張,

當我50歲的時候,我應該已經是一個成功的咖啡館主人,而且我咖啡館的生意會非常好,由於我的策略性行銷.

為了精進自己對於市場趨勢以及改良創新的方向,我也會在睡前看些有關商業的書籍or 瀏覽些國際新聞和時下年輕人的kuso想法等等I guess that I must feel very happiness and satisfied at that time.

【下面的是回覆~~可是我覺得文法好像有點怪怪的~~

是不是可以幫我看一看呢??感謝!!】

In high school's time. Because under a cause opportune moment, I have fallen in love with the coffee, from starts at that time, I have a dream, I want to open one to belong to my cafe, I have made very many effort, achieves this wish, how including joins the coffee society study basic to soak the coffee as well as to go to the coffee shop to practise how sells the coffee.

I want after the university graduation, I to be supposed to be able to look for a regular duty the work to raise the fund first, in order to my cafe could in my 35 year old of before was open for business officially,

when I 50 year-old time, I should already be a successful cafe master, moreover my cafe business could be extremely good, as a result of mine strategical marketing.

Now and then,I another one half can with my same place(我和我的另一半)introduce our customers the history of every kind of coffee bean, or teach them how to boil a wonderful coffee which with fragrance and good taste , showed on the TV programs or magazines just like those celebrities do. Also, I will donate my obtained part philanthropic institution and mail back for parents. Sometimes, to spend leisure time in afternoon, I will drive everywhere stroll or go climbing and so on.

In order to strive oneself regarding the market tendency as well as the improvement innovation direction front, I also can in rest look at a related commercial a books or browsing international news and the present young people's kuso idea.I guess that I must feel very happiness and satisfied at that time.

Update:

"study basic to soak the coffee"

這句話是不是怪怪的阿??

Update 2:

不好意思~~

如果我做個修改,變成:(part1)

"So far, I have made...,甚至我都已經想好在從這裡畢業後,I plan to get a regular job to raise the fund first,and hopefully, before I am 35 years old, I can officially open my coffee store near schools or nightmarket because我愛熱鬧.

感謝~~

Update 3:

(修改part2)

(上接我愛熱鬧.)To me,單身並不可恥,so如果無法找到一個和我興趣相投的伴侶的話,我可能還是會從家中搬出去住,but with my friends or分租的roommates.Then, when I am 50 year-old,......"

"Now and then, my another half,if I have(還是had?), can be..."

並在最後加上:and說不定連鄰居們都會羨慕我呢!(英文??)

再次感謝!!...我問題很多的~~抱歉!!

Update 4:

我最後的問題你沒有答耶~~真的很不好意思又麻煩你~~XD

"說不定連鄰居們都會羨慕我呢!"(英文我不會寫~~)

感謝!!

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    劃底線部分為修正處

    In the time when I was studying in high school, owing to a special occasion, I have fallen in love with coffee, and I had a dream from then on, I wished I can open a caf that belongs to me, I have made so many efforts to achieve this goal, including joining the coffee society to study basic to soak the coffee as well as going to the coffee shop to practice the sell of coffee.

    註:

    1.coffee 非指定特定的咖啡,勿加 the.

    2.from then on 從那時起

    3.很多 so many,quite many,一般不用very many,但有不可數的very much.

    4.達到目標 achieve the goal , reach the goal , 但少有 achieve the wish的說法。

    5.include 包含 其下應是名詞、動名詞或是分詞,故動詞須加ing

    6. join the coffee society to study……除非有其它規則,否則兩個動詞間(join和study)一般須加to

    I plan to get a regular job to raise the fund first after I graduated from the university, so I can officially open my coffee store before I am 35 years old,

    and I think when I am 50 year-old , I should be a successful cafe owner, moreover, my cafe business could be extremely good and that is a result of my strategical marketing.

    註:

    1. 原英譯文裡有很多非常規的英文用法,是錯誤的,因太多無法一一解釋,我將它改寫了,請將它看熟即可,研讀英文的方法之一就背誦文章,把文章的寫法看熟了,漸漸的就會使用它。

    2. I am 35 years old 或是 I am 35 year-old , year 和 old 間沒有衡槓時,year須加s.

    3. 咖啡店主人 caf owner , caf master 意思比較近於 咖啡專家。

    4. mine 的意思是 my something 是所有格加上所有物的合稱,例如 your cat is cute, and mine too, 此處的mine 等 my cat. 故 my strategical marketing , my後面已有所有物,不可再用mine,且使用此字,其所有物必須在前面句中已提過的(如cat),否則將不清楚所有物為何?

    Now and then, my another half can be with me to introduce our customers the history of every kind of coffee bean, or teach them how to boil a cup of wonderful coffee which with fragrance and good taste , the above will be showed on the TV programs or magazines just like those celebrities do, also, I will donate part of what I obtained to philanthropic institution and mail some back to my parents, sometimes, I will spend leisure time in afternoon for driving to everywhere or going climbing and so on.

    註: a cup of coffee , 沒有 a coffee的說法

    2008-11-04 16:31:50 補充:

    In order to improve my knowledge of the market tendency as well as the direction of innovation, I also will read some related commercial books or browse international news and learn young peoples’ kuso ideas etc., I believe that I will feel very happy and satisfied at that time.

    2008-11-04 16:32:53 補充:

    註:

    1.看書報雜誌 用read ,讀書 用study,不可用look at.

    2.我也會在睡前 I also will ……, 而 I also can…………. 則是"我也能",意思不同。

    3. feel後須使用形容詞。

    2008-11-05 14:45:49 補充:

    我忽略了,如是指學習 基本技術,加 skill 一字即可,study basic skill to sock....

    前說沒有 a coffee 的說法,是因以單一種咖啡本身來講,它就像water一樣,不可以一個、二個、三個來算,須用如一杯、一碗、一公升等來計。

    2008-11-05 23:19:05 補充:

    So far, I have made a decision that after I graduated form the university, I will try to get a regular job to raise the fund first, and hopefully, before I am 35 years old, I can officially open my coffee store near school or nightmarket because I prefer making business in a prosperous area.

    2008-11-05 23:19:17 補充:

    註:

    1. make a decision 已是在做計畫,後面不必再用 plan .

    2. near school, school 不要加s , 一般學校都是單一設置於一區,店可同時接近數家學校的情況並不多。

    2008-11-05 23:20:32 補充:

    前述之 cafe master 及cafe owner 之cafe 都少了e字。(因近視未戴眼鏡)

    2008-11-05 23:34:03 補充:

    to me, being a single person is not shameful , so if I can''t find a life mate with the same interests as mine in the futrue, I will possibly move out to rent a house or a room sharing with my friends or other people, then, when I am 50 year-old,......"

    2008-11-05 23:37:08 補充:

    if I have 或 if I had, 須視情況而決定,如果所談的事是你認為是與事實相反的,用had 如 if I had a dog,但實際並沒有,如果認為假設的不無可能,使用現在式have.

    2008-11-06 22:27:00 補充:

    maybe my neighbors will be jealous of me.

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