Critique My New Poem... The Shredding of JiJi ?

Update: JiJi
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Update 2: It is all over
The mirroris broken
JiJi is gone
JiJi is mystry
JiJi is devoured by demons
JiJi
The flower that blossomed
has withered
Still there is
faint voice from the past
of sweet JiJi
that once
she was
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