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Describe an ideal apartment or house

You must say:

Where you will like to have your ideal apartment/ house?

What kind of surroundings you will prefer around your apartment ?

How about its interior decoration? And explain why it suits you or will suit you?

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我的作答:

I live in an apartment in Taoyung County where near my parents flat. Well, I think that an ideal apartment or house have some conditions including, good living function, a large space enough to live for a family or myself and idyllic environment as well.

When it comes to its surrounding, I prefer to live a place near a park where able to conveniently reach a park, such as New York Central Park or Hyde Park in London. I know its cost must be very expansive but it is my dream house.

I quite like modernism interior design; everything seems to be quite clear and stylish. I don’t need a lot of decorations in my apartment because I tend to maintain everything being simple, for me simple is more. However, it must be functional for people to live.

That is my personal opinion about how an ideal apartment should be.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    I live in an apartment in Taoyuang County where is near my parents' flat. To me, an ideal apartment should have some necessary conditions, including good living functions, a space large enough for my family or myself to live in, and, indispensably, an idyllic environment as well.

    When it comes to the surroundings, I prefer to live in a department where I could conveniently go to a large park, such as New York Central Park or Hyde Park in London. Although the daprtments there must be quite expensive, they are still my dream houses.

    I like modemnistic interior design which every seems to be very clear and stylish. In my apartment, too many decorations are not necessary; it's because that I am fond of simple things. For me, being simple is the world. However, the functions for living are required.

    The above is my personal opinion about how an ideal apartment should be.

    Source(s): myself
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  • 弒殺
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    TO:Elisa

    你是外國人嗎??

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  • 1 decade ago

    Elisa, Thank you so much! It's really helpful for me. Thanks again!

    Aaron~^_^

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  • Elisa
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    Some corrections to 屋頂上的月光's grammar.

    I live in an apartment in Taoyuang County near my parents' flat.

    (incorrect grammar to use "where in")

    2008-10-11 03:19:24 補充:

    Correct usage of where & in which:

    This is the place where I was born.

    This is the place in which I was born.

    I live in an apartment in Taipei where no cats are allowed.

    I live in an apartment in Taipei in which no cats are allowed.

    2008-10-11 03:26:16 補充:

    Typo:

    When it comes to the surroundings, I prefer to live in “an apartment” where I could conveniently go to a large park, such as New York Central Park or Hyde Park in London.

    2008-10-11 03:26:32 補充:

    Word usage error:

    Although the "apartments" there "are" quite expensive, they are still my dream houses.

    => Since you used the word "Although", it is strange and awkard to use the verb "must be".

    2008-10-11 03:34:02 補充:

    Grammar and typo:

    I like “modernistic” interior design which "seem" to be very clear and stylish.

    2008-10-11 03:34:36 補充:

    => which is used to modify interior design, indicating that "interior designs" seem to be very clear and stylish, so you cannot use "every" right after "which", and the verb needs to be plural.

    Overall, try to get away from writing in Chinese writing logic.

    2008-10-11 03:47:52 補充:

    As for "The United Aaron", what your wrote wasn't bad. This is my correction for you.

    I live in an apartment in Taoyung County near my parents flat.

    2008-10-11 03:50:00 補充:

    I think that an ideal apartment or house must have some features that are practical for living, a space large enough for a family or me and an idyllic environment as well.

    2008-10-11 03:50:14 補充:

    When it comes to its surrounding, I prefer to live in a place accessible to a park, such as New York Central Park or Hyde Park in London. I know it is pricy but it is my dream house.

    2008-10-11 03:51:20 補充:

    I like modernistic interior design as it seems quite clear and stylish. I don’t need a lot of decorations in my apartment because I like simple. For me simple is more; however, it must be functional for living.

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