紅豆冰 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

[英文]請幫我修改我的英文自傳,贈10點,感謝(part2)

由於對自然科學有濃厚的興趣,於是從大學時代開始就選擇念化工。就讀大學感受到很不一樣的生活方式,自我學習、自我規劃成了大學的求學方法,舉凡專題報告、實驗研究、報告作業等皆投注了很多的心力,充實了不少化工方面的能力;來自各地的同學和學長們,讓我從中學習情同手足、互敬互愛的團體生活。大學畢業後申請上了母校的研究所,就讀研究所時接觸到更多儀器與實驗,且培養了獨立思考與解決問題的能力。

I chose to study in the chemical engineering since era of the university because of having thick interests to natural science. When I studied in college, I felt very different life style. Studying and planning by oneself is the method of learning in university. I made more efforts to finish my report on a special topic, experimental study, a report and homework, so I got much ability of chemical industry. Classmates and schoolmates from each regions let me learn the group life which is like brothers, mutual love and deep respect. I applied to go to the research institute in the same college after my graduation from the university. While studying in the research institute, I touched more instruments and experiments, and cultivated the ability of thinking independently and solving the problem.

在求學過程,有幸能夠多方嘗試各種工讀機會,曾在大潤發擔任收銀員,學習到與工讀生或是與正職的大哥、大姐間的人際關係與相處,還有面對形形色色的客人所應有的工作態度、靈敏度。在達美樂工讀的那段日子使我體會到服務業分秒必爭,且亟需團隊合作的重要性,而其他工讀生、解題老師的工作,也讓我在事情處理的態度上更為積極認真與負責,思維也更周密。在我的觀念中,無論是做什麼工作都必須盡力,方能從中得到許多生活經驗,與如何善用時間。

I had the honor to try part-time chances variously during my studying at school. I had taken on a cashier at RT-mart where I learned to get along with part-time students or full-time work for elder brothers and sisters. Furthermore, I learned that I should own working attitude and sensitivity when I faced varied guests. When I was a part-time student at Domino’s, I realized that service industry seizes every minute and second, and needed the importance of team cooperation in that period of time. Then other jobs, like part-time students and problem solving teacher, let me dealt with things more positively and conscientiously, the thought is also more careful. In my idea, I work hard regardless of any jobs, make me get a lot of experience of life and how to make good use of time.

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不好意思,英文真的不行,感謝Я хочу大大的意見

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  • 1 decade ago
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    括符內為修改處,請參考:

    I chose to (major in) (the 去除) chemical engineering (when I studied in) the university (was due to) (a great) interest(s去除) to natural science, (and) when I (was a college student), I felt (it was a) very different life style, (self-study) and planning by oneself is the method of learning in university. I (devoted) (many) efforts to finish my report(s) on (a 去除) special topic, experimental (researches), report(s) and homework(s), so I got (more) abilit(ies) (in) chemical (engineering), classmates and (the seniors) (who are) from (different) regions , let me learn the group life (with) mutual love and deep respect, I applied (the studentship of) the research institute in the same college after (I graduated) from the university, While studying in the research institute, I (experienced) more instruments and experiments, and cultivated the ability of thinking independently and solving (problems).

    I (was fortunate enough) to take various part-time (jobs) (when I studied) at school, I had (been) taken on a cashier (for) RT-mart where I learned to get along with part-time students or full-time (senior workers), furthermore, I learned that I should own (right) working attitude and sensitivity when I faced (various) guests, (while) I was a part-time student at Domino’s, I realized that service industry seizes every minute and second, and need(s) (the importance of 去除) team cooperation (to accomplish every work),.(and in) other jobs, (credited to learning from) (those) part-time students and problem solving teacher, I knew how to deal with things more positively and conscientiously, (my) thought also became more careful, in my (viewpoint), (working) hard for any job(s去除) (that will) make (you) get a lot of experience(s) of life and (understand) how to (better take advantage) of time.

    註:因修改工作已花費不少時間,請自行檢視為何如此修改。

  • 1 decade ago

    看了你的英文自傳, 直覺是用翻譯軟體翻的內容,

    如果不能自己寫出來的自傳, 有些公司面試時,

    會直接用英文interview, 且會要求提供英文自傳的

    公司, 將來大致上有機會工作中要用到英文, 你

    難不成以後碰到任何英文的問題, 都要到知識來

    求助???? 上司問你一個什麼事, 你說要等幾天才

    能回答他???? 這種方式真的很投機取巧. 建議你

    好好認真的養成自己的英文能力.

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